Tender Will

Poem

Today

Does it have to be today?

So, you never want to play?

Yes, I do, Mom. But today?

Please

I am grabbing the car keys

Do I really have to, please?

Must I get down on my knees?

Try

If I have to I will cry

You think that will get you by?

Since you love me I won't lie

Love?

Oh look, Mom, there's a white dove

Do you need a little shove?

No, I'm fine. I have your love

Author's Note

Short piece with hidden meaning.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I can't help but read the first word of every stanza in sequence: "Today Please Try Love" . . . that's what stands out to me (& I really love the creativity of doing it this way), even tho I wasn't particularly following the details of this scenario at first. I think this is a back-and-forth between mom & kid, but the person speaking each line isn't clear for me upon the first reading. Anyhow, I like the whimsical nature of the message, even if I'm not 100% dialed in.

[Mehameha]

Thank you for reading and your review. Not my best work for sure. But sometimes you just have to write what comes out. Yes a mom and her reluctant child. The resistance all us parents face and the surprise when they see the big picture before you expect it. Kids are precious.

[barleygirl]

Since I never had kids & I'm never around kids, it's always interesting to me to get a peek inside this world (((HUGS)))

[Mehameha]

I don't know if this a particular style in poetry. But I kept each conversation line at 7 syllables for effect.

[barleygirl]

I sometimes enjoy trying various poetry styles where syllable counts are central to the style. But sometimes poets do something new, like you've done here, give it a name, & then suddenly they are the creators of a new poetry style. Maybe you should do that! *smile*