The Smiles That We Share

Please read and tell me what you think.

The smiles that we have, 

are they different like faces

or the same like the rain?

Could the tears we shed

be from pain or joy?

Could the steps we take

a short while or all eternity?

I question that these are all

the smiles that we steal.

Will we ever step further

than we already are? With

the clouds that shadow us

on our way over the burnt bridge;

the journey is dark and morbid,

but is fun and adventurous. 

We enjoy every taste of new culture,

the sights that we see on the trail

to a happy life and amazing future

puts smiles on our faces,

and I realize that these

are the smiles that we share.

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Another beautiful poem!! Pass where ends the sky, and we wave the rainbows by, we look for inspiration everywhere. Such is what I've done tonight with YOU. I read two lines and felt like I wanted to stay. It didn't seem fair that in my youth I could imagine a world above the clouds that kissed the heavens, but also stretched to infinity, just past them, too!! Your last two lines are like that last kiss you get after an awesome date night, and you have had great conversation or whatever else..... and the night ends, perfectly! Splitting this poem in two makes it look refined and professional. Some of your lines sound a little "matter-of-fact" and lose its intensity, but they are gorgeous, Melanie... The first four lines of the second stanza is what I'm referring to. Wonderful job!! xoxo -Mark

[Melody]

Thank you so much, Mark! I'm glad to know that I'm achieving a professional and refined look in my poetry while still expressing what I want and love to express. Thank you so much.

[Patrick Henry]

You are MOST welcome!! Can't believe what fun I'm having. lol Butter on my popcorn is messing with me, though. ; ) xoxo -Mark

[Melody]

Lol. That's why I get kettle corn, although I do enjoy some good caramel corn as well. Lol

[Fréyjä Helv..]

A thoughtful piece... nice

[Melody]

Thank you.

[Vittoria]

What a beautiful piece; full of emotion and thoughtfulness. For me, there is almost a dreamlike quality to this; helped, I think, by your flowing lines and distorted grammer. Well done; this is truly beautiful.

[Melody]

Thank you! I actually thought the distorted grammar, that I didn't do purposely, hurt it because of the flowing lines, so I was a bit scared. Lol, but I'm glad it is liked. Thank you. :)