Jack the Ripper

Written in class today for an assignment. Please read

His knife craving blood
his hands shaking from lack of buzz
his heart beat matching the quickness of his thoughts.

Jack is the ripper
of the night
in the city
under the moon
among the people
of the day.

Author's Note

Written in class for an assihnment dealing with the different kinds of phrases. Please tellnme what you think.

Reviews

[little bad puppy]

yes yes yes, glissening crimson curtans of liquid scarlet. flowing down my milky curves and accents. -giggle- thats my favorite dress.

[Moon]

Jack the Ripper, a well known serial killer and an inspiration for many dark writings :) . These words suit him quite well. Nice job!

[Melody]

Thank you.

[Moon]

You are welcome

[Sam Gregory]

Pretty good, simplistic but effective all the same. My only feedback is to try find different ways of using imagery to make things seem more vivid :)

[Melody]

Got it. Thank you, Sam.

[Bexasaurus]

It seems fun to read, but think about it...when writing poems it's important to figure out what part you're playing. The puppet master or the puppeteer~ all in all, well done! A tip about writing dark poems...make sure to make it seem lonely.

[Melody]

I shall look at that. :) Thank you so much Bexasaurus