Dark Citrus Candy

Hazy euphoric visions.

Here I am with my hands stretched out

Waiting for something sweet to hold onto.

Suddenly exposed to doubt

What midnight had to say about the ocean's blue.

Standing here and I'm throwing my thoughts out at sea.

Wondering what the hell it is that's wrong with me.

I think about what it is souls are meant for.

Trying to make sense of it all and I never get bored.

 

I'm swaying at bay with little yellow flowers in my hair.

I'm starting to get sick of the August stained air.

Don't know what it was that drove me here.

I've been walking through this grey haze for years.

 

All I know is that it hurt when the truth grazed my velvet lips.

Dark citrus candy sugared them. It felt like a crystalized bliss.

Euphoria guides me and helps me forget how messed up I am.

Licking the honey off my knuckles even though it has gone bad.

 

I could make Cloud 9 my new home.

At least then I would know where to go.

It's hopeless to think I'll leave the vibrant colored skies.

It falls far from a miracle.

Under the neon lights

And everything is cerebral.

Reviews

[dan]

Maria, Your writing talent amazes me. First of all, great title (taken from within the writs). One may wonder how a citrus thing can be dark, but that little bit of wordplay is an example of your writing elegance. I like how you used rhyme in the piece but didn't try to make each line in sync (syllables matching) and did not worry about the rhythm of the pace, the meter imparted. This COULD HAVE made the piece read awkwardly, but you make it work just by gripping the reader in your exquisite wording. I'm saving this to my library favorites, so thank you for that. I'm quickly becoming a fan of your work. take care...dan

[Isabel]

My influences derive from almost anything and everything, hence the title. Thank you for taking the time to review! I greatly appreciate it.

[Philip Muls]

Evokes strong imaging. I like also the ending, everything cerebral.

[Isabel]

Thanks for the comment!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful imagery!
A warm, dreamy one.
Eloquent piece!
Left me thinking for a while.
Liked it!

[Isabel]

Thank you Jyoti!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[B]

We all go through moments in our life
We cut off the world
to discover a direction
away from all influences
To really understand life a little bit better
A very hard journey
Because you can't see much
until a miracle comes through
with light
guidance
then the journey was worth it ............

Love it a very soulful write

[Isabel]

Very interesting views. Thank you Nisreenaa!

[Ohhhwillow]

This is, honestly, a very alluring and euphoric piece. The momentum is relentless, yet light, underneath the shadows you have painted; of a figure, standing over the flux of water. Insights such as 'I never get bored', illuminate the reality of your disposition beneath the stream of calm discomfort that overlies. The final stanza draws it all together in a cloud of, what seems like, metaphysical contemplation.. This is lovely. Thank you, Willow x

[Isabel]

Well said! Thanks for your review.