Raining Madness

I haven't written anything in awhile and I decided to play with some ideas I've had. *Added more to the original

Rain gently falls

Choking off my plea

Pounding away at my last strands of hope

Clawing at the chains around me

Torturing myself with the lies you committed

Washing away the evidence of the pain inflicted

Addicted to the silence it creates

Craving the sharp kisses of metal

Drifting deeper into the madness

Spiraling ever deeper

Falling pray to the demons lurking around the corner

Reaching for the light

yet never quite grasping its hand

Slipping under the pressure

Breaking open the gates

Painting the world scarlet

Madness gently falls

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think or if you have any ideas on how to make this better. I've added some more to this piece. Hope it is liked :)

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

There is deep intensity and mangled thoughts in in these words, Serena Whether they are genuinely felt or an exercise, an adventure into darkness, is your business but there is a distinct and successful intention to take your readers from their own place to yours.

' Reaching for the light .. .. yet never quite grasping its hand '
- certainly happens for sure, not merely above but in life - like it or not. When it gallops on and on, can lead one into a slough of madness. Whatever your meaning or a reader's possible conclusion, you write very well and - placing your words in a way that ought to be noticed. Thank you, Serena.

Your poem's atmosphere hardly suits your name! :)

[Serena]

I honestly forgot I even had this account on here. Thank you so much :)
I wrote this poem before I was diagnosed with depression, so I assume it was one of my low days when this poem was written.

[emmajoygreen]

Serena, I so hope you are more able to stay in here and display some happier or at least, calmer, hopeful thoughts. You would be oh so welcome!

[Serena]

I'll hopefully post more on here to share now that I remember this website :)

[emmajoygreen]

Good, applauding... soon!

[James Paranormal]

This is a great example of dark poetry in free verse, as it is powerful, and well written!

[Serena]

Thank you :)

[Papaya]

Sort of feels like someone trapped, trying to break out of a cage.

[Serena]

Sometimes I do feel like that. I don't remember the inspiration for this poem, but it was probably one of those moments when I felt trapped :)

[Davidgeo]

arf, arf !

[SimplyaGhost]

Short but good all I can say is if it was longer it would be amazing however it's already a nice piece of art :)

[Serena]

I may add more to it. I've just run out of ideas. Still a work in progress:)