The Hunter - #2

I wrote this Based on this picture. with a goal of a thousand words. i went a little over but here ya go XD

The Hunter

Running through the trees, I felt alive. I knew I shouldn’t have left my pack, but I wanted to prove to them I wasn’t a hindrance. That I could hunt just as well as my brother. He was the pack leader now, since my father abdicated his role. I had to prove myself worthy to him, otherwise he would also think of me as just his little sister. Weaker than him. I could be strong too. I would show him. I stared up at the sun through the trees, normally we hunted at night. I felt like I wouldn’t be missed if I left while everyone was asleep. Maybe hunting would even be easier during the day. 

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Reviews

[Joe_VILOT_]

fascinating, gripping yet morbid indeed.
Tales the sad tale of what some pathetic descraters of natures natural order
do when they are either ignorant or too belligerent driving to the destruction of
growth itself.
well done the words indeed painted the wolfs? Life perfectly.

[Andrea Mouser]

im glad you liked it :D

[wordman]

good story keep me on the seats edge

[Andrea Mouser]

I'm glad you liked it :) like extremely glad

[wordman]

you are extremely welcome

[Arrow]

I love how you write. Wonderful piece.

[Andrea Mouser]

Thank you :) i was tempted to do a 3rd piece but im afraid its liable to become darker. sooooo i think i might just start a NEW short story based another picture

[Arrow]

Darker can always be good! Let the story write itself is what I always say.

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the style and the pace. I did notice something grip my leg as opposed to gripped.

[Andrea Mouser]

saying she noticed it, is like saying i noticed this fly buzzing around my head, or that chair in the corner. she got her leg trapped in a bear trap. so it was Instant pain. not something you notice. something that Happened

[Lyn Anderson]

What? I do not understand your point. I was just trying to say that "something grip my leg" should be something GRIPPED my leg, seeing as the rest is past tense, and present tense would be grips. Sorry, apparently you thought I wanted you to put notice in there? I was saying I noticed that error.

[Andrea Mouser]

LOL XD okay i fixed it

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem. misinterpretation. I try to be kind and gentle when I notice a mistake, hence, I noticed ...

[Andrea Mouser]

yeah i noticed XD i just read it wrong