The spirit inside

All alone in the dark
Sketching out an idea in the moonlight
TV flickering it's eerie colors
Blood falling on the stained covers
Notebook dark as night
Reflecting the spirit inside.

 

All alone in the dark
Sadness overcoming all the senses
Why did it have to end this way
It doesn't matter, it'd end anyway
Forgetting all the pretenses
Remembering the spirit inside.

 

All alone in the dark
Fallen into the dark abyss
To which none can escape
A spectre, taken an vulture's shape
Circles overhead in the black sky
Craving the spirit inside.

 

All alone in the dark
Looking up, quite a scene
An angel floating down to me
Her bright wings flapping free
Her bright eyes so keen
Helping the spirit inside.

 

No longer alone in the dark
My guardian angel by my side
She delivers me back from whence I came
She disappears into the flame
Of the warm, welcoming fireplace
Reclaiming the spirit inside.

Reviews

[Aranee]

Aww... the poor thing. D:
BTW I think TV should be both in capital letters.

"dissappears" only one 's', disappears.

"Blood falling on the stained covers"
What happens in this cryptic phrase?
I'm too afraid to even think of it =A=

"Fallen into the dark abyss To which none can escape"
I think this is a beatiful-yet-dark-line.
It a bit, I don't know, stimulating to the brain cells? Like making you think about where the place is?
There's also that weird feeling where you know you don't want to go there?

"Notebook dark as night Reflecting the spirit inside."
This line makes me feel that the spirit might be broken? Not evil. But broken.

"Tv flickering it's eerie colors"
This line just reminds me of sleepless nights and creepy TV from The Ring.
I think it's a perfect setting to start of with :D

Good write :B
I hope to read more =A=!

[babyblue]

I realy loved the spritual side you brought out in a sad depressing poem good technique,and very inspirational.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Your poem shows hope and that's always good.

[Krazy On The Outside]

I like how you use the name at the end of each stanza.
I like the way you rhymed!
Great job.

[Sexy P3nguin]

OMG
tHANK YOU FOR ENTERING MY CONTEST
This poem is off the freaking chain!!
I love it so much it's defiantly a finalist and adding it to my reading list Great job

[Rachel Koepke]

I love in this poem and im soo glad that you entered it my contest i havent read the others but yours is definately a finalist.

[Rachel]

UM, FAN-FLIPPIN-TASTIC! I love this one! This is my favorite poem of your's yet! It is so beautifully written! And what a great story! WOW!