Travel Under the Northern Star

A dream of travel to distant realms.

No interest I have for the galaxy

But for the world around me that I see

It seems explored and dull to me

But then I fall into a dream

 

I dream a dream of traveling

This world that only I could see

For myself what really lies

Not one place I shall pass by

 

No interest I have for the galaxy

The green grass fields, the wind-blown seas

The trees that reach up to the skies

The beauty of the Earth’s last cry

 

I dream a dream of traveling far

To ride seas under the northern star

To find what others failed to see

The ancient marks and where they lay

The cool mists of the ocean’s bay

 

             

Author's Note

Anything you think I should change about this? Critics are welcome. Does it flow well? How is the rhyme? If you could compare this poem to a landscape, what type would it be? Thank you for reading. -Michael

Reviews

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I think it flows smoothly, I don't really see anything that I would change. What I picture when reading this, is someone sailing the ocean with the night sky being perfectly mirrored in the water ^^ such a pretty picture. Oh, I did notice that the last stanza is longer than the others, was that on purpose or did you want to stick with the same number in all of them? It's not a big deal, just something I noticed lol

Good Job

[Michael Thrower]

Yes, the last stanza was purposefully longer :D And that is really nice to hear! Thank you for reading and reviewing this.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

lol okie dokiez, and you're welcome

[Elsa Linnet]

Very nice poem, visually stimulating and flowing well, great work!

[?]

fantastic. others might say to change it here and thee but i say keep it like it is because it is a masterpiece, its rhyme was good, it painted an amazing picture i loved it a lot :) it was perfect

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you! Reading that really made me feel good :)

[?]

haha anytime :p

[Ruth]

Flows well...though I sure wouldn't mind seeing the galaxy lol Saying that, to travel would be epic...to see a different sunset on new shores ... enjoyed :)

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you, and that does sound nice.

[Mak(ayla:)]

The entire time I read this I heard it in Rafiki's voice from The Lion King.
But it's really good(: I enjoyed the imagination and the visual I got from it. Very breath taking and beautiful! Nicely written.

-Mak(:

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you so much, and that is hilarious! I'm glad you enjoyed; now I'll be reading it in Rafiki's voice.

[Sami Khalil]

"I dream a dream of traveling far
To ride seas under the northern star
To find what others failed to see"

Keep up the dream and poetry. Bravo...................

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you! It's odd because I don't really enjoy poetry, but I can say with enough assurance that I can write it rather well. Thank you again.

[Sami Khalil]

Steve Job was odd. But look what happened. You are welcome...:)......................

[audrie]

It makes total sense and creates an experience that is beautifully described. The flow was nice and I liked it that not all of it rhymed because sometimes only focusing on rhryming can take away from the truth of the poem. . . good job. . .peace, balance and harmony

[Michael Thrower]

Thank you very much :) That means a lot to me.