The whispers of a candle

A candle light flickers

 showing the darkness around me

I hear the hushed whispers,

 but no one else is here

Fear curls around my throat

 suffocating me in pain, I shut my eyes

to the whispers they start slowly chanting,

 I stumble looking for a way out but i can't,

 I am slowly loosing my vision

 I gasp for air, slowly my lungs expand

 the rythmic chanting hushes and a candle brightens

i see like before without the dark haze,

 A golden light sparks from the candle showing a hint of bronze from a doorknob,

i sprint towards it and yank the door open

 as i start to walk out the candle dims and starts to drip a thick dark red ooze,

 blood.

Reviews

[Lucien Maier]

Very nice visuals in the piece, Great discriptions

[scripted]

this is a depression filled write... i like it , this piece shows an honest side to reality... nice job on this one:) yours truely Danielle (scripted)

[Bianca]

you really like it? thanks i didn't know if people would like this one, still i took a chance and posted it. But thank you

[scripted]

its not as bad as you think my dear... you did a lovely job on it:)

[Bianca]

thanks i shall post more of my poems soon hope you enjoy some of the ones that i as well posted