The Last Dance

It’s the last lap; the last dance;

Soon the music shall cease;

And dry our skins shall be.

In a matter of minutes, we shall be exhausted,

As we soon shall perspire from the heat of the moment.

Forever, it shall be etched to the vein-cracked walls of our hearts;

We never shall forget.

The melody, bitter-sweet, shall be hummed in our generations;

They too, never shall forget.

Author's Note

Any thoughts?

Reviews

[Ashwin Shanker]

Lovely poem bro.
Well-crafted and short.

[Akshita]

It's really beautiful and cool! But would you mind explaining it to me a bit??

[Mifa]

It's basically a youth/growing old and living in the moment poem, hence my referring to life as a 'music' and to living it as 'dancing' of some sort.

The first line: "It’s the last lap; the last dance;"
This refers to the point of transition of adolescence to adulthood. It's kind of a bell chime/warning sign for the adolescent to ensure they are aware that that blissful dance of their age where everything could be enjoyed, felt, experienced and regrets overlooked is almost at a close.

The second line: "Soon the music shall cease"
This just goes on to reiterate the point of the first line. A warning bell chiming, saying the hedonism of youth is almost at an end.

The third, fourth and fifth line: "And dry our skins shall be.
In a matter of minutes, we shall be exhausted,
As we soon shall perspire from the heat of the moment."

This basically informs the youthful of what is to come when the rigorous dance of that age is over. The would be wont to tire quickly. 'Perspire' could stand for the after product of their lifestyle, good or bad; the consequence to their action of living in the moment.

The sixth and seventh line: "Forever, it shall be etched to the vein-cracked walls of our hearts;
We never shall forget."

Youthfulness is a charm and one major reason is that as it spans we collate myriads of memories and regrets and as time goes on we may forget some of them. However, we seldom forget 'living-in-the-moment' kinds of memories, e.g. a first kiss; a first whiff of marijuana, a heart break, getting laid, party crashing, etc. Basically, we are seldom prone to forget moment when we 'danced' on the edge (substituting 'living' for 'dancing' as I did in the poem)

The eight and ninth lines: "The melody, bitter-sweet, shall be hummed in our generations;
They too, never shall forget."

Dancing on the edge and the memories and regret that it brings along are seldom forgotten even when we try hard to. If you're someone who likes the debauchery of youthfulness, there's always the off chance you get someone pregnant or get pregnant yourself, if you're a lady and that offspring is often a reminder, hence the line "shall be hummed in our generations". You might do an abortion but even that comes back to haunt you someway. But, one thing is certain, a lot of these memories are bitter-sweet, you may wish you have dance a little slower and not have to tire too quickly but you seldom ever regret dancing entirely. So the poem encourages a sort of balance cause at the end of the day, no one gets to dance forever.

I hope that helps. Thanks for reading Akshita.

[Akshita]

Okay! It's got an interesting meaning! : )

[T. Edana Talbott]

Very passionate, great flow. I see no reason to change this at all!

[Mifa]

Thanks a lot for the review Edana. I agree, no need to change it at all.