Not Real

My eyes are closed

But I can still taste you

I can still feel you

Now the music curls…

back and forth

Soft and flowing

ready for you

don’t you know?

It’s not you that I crave

but something

something

reaching for it

then it’s gone.

I was longing to see

Who I wanted to be

Ive been making up my world

And in it, you were told

More than you deserved

My eyes are closed

But I can still taste you

I can still feel you.

Even if it’s not real.

Even if

It’s not real.

Author's Note

I'm starting to experiment with poetry. I usually write articles. :)

Reviews

[Inspiring Writer]

Ok.. that's great you too write Articles if you've dropped few of them here on this site, i'd like to know about your articles too, i'd read as well.
This write's nice, it's about love i think and it's sweet, lovely and it's totally Heartfelt write. Last stanza's your first stanza's awesome and you've well penned each one i gotta say. I lliked your ending of this write. It makes me Real too :)
great job!

[zainul]

First hit so fast!
Wonderful dancing piece.

[MindyRuby]

thank you :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome.:)

[Anand Sehgal]

It’s not you that I crave
but something
something
reaching for it
then it’s gone.

beautiful.... Trance :)

[MindyRuby]

thanks. what's "trance" mean?

[Anand Sehgal]

A magical state of mind :)

[Playing with Demons]

I have to say your experimentations went successful. I liked the way the poem seemed to dance. You expressed that deep longing very well.

[MindyRuby]

Thanks, ant. I like that you like the way the poem seemed to dance. I was listening to music when I wrote it. :)

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

You have expressed sadness and longing very nicely in this piece. Write on...and welcome to WC!

[MindyRuby]

Thanks Sharon, I appreciate the comment. :)

[Knightingale]

Well you're poetry is beautiful, so keep it up. Even if it's only for my reading pleasure lol

[MindyRuby]

Thanks, Knightingale, for the first-ever comment on my first-ever poem. :)

[Knightingale]

Lol its my pleasure. I'm new to this myself. I've been writing for years and I only just joined a few days ago so others could see my writing. I'd love to hear your thoughts on a few of my pieces if you ever get the time.

[MindyRuby]

OK, I'll take a look. Anything in particular?

[Knightingale]

Hmm...well Where the Flowers Bloom or maybe You Helped Me Breathe. I have a short story on here that's really just a journal entry lol but I won't have you read that unless you really want to. Btw, anything else of yours you'd recommend?