Longing

ღ Longing ღ


Trying to sleep as I rest my head
On a pillow I strongly hold
I touch the empty side of my bed
Satin sheets feel so cold

My skin feels your warm touch
I long for so much
Your perfume on my wrist
Carries me away through the mist

Each minute I spend awake
Is another heartache
Still further… still apart
And the pain is yet to start

Longing for your kiss
Everything in you I miss
Longing for the touch of your hand
As the sea longs for its sand

I close my eyes and dream away
Walk with me along the shore
Take my hand in yours and say
You will leave me no more

Hold me closer inhale me through
Take me deeper into you
Feel my breath in your face
Feel my step in your pace

Looking around
You're nowhere to be found
I'm still all alone
Staring at a dead phone.

ღ Mira ღ

Author's Note

Reviews

[Robert Gluzman]

The purpose of the poem is perfectly created with the way you portray desire that the memories bring. Truly this poem show how people who were once in loved or still are may experience when not together anymore.

However this "Staring at a dead phone." caught me off guard, perhaps all the other metaphors were very natural and the modernness (technology) of a "phone" didnt seem to me that it was a part of it. Then again its only me personally and its not a big deal.

[Betty Hermelee]

Long separations from a loved one is simply painful... it makes your heart ache in so many ways....the loss of touch, smell ,listening, , hugging, kissing and more; I wrote a book about separation between two lovers, one at war and other pining away across a vast ocean...missing him so....returning for brief...then losing him again..... I like your writing very much and the structure of he poem.
Warmly, B

[Winslow Des Totes]

Funny, I got up and went to my computer because I couldn't sleep and here I find the perfect poem that expresses exactly how I feel. Every word spoke true and settled deep within my bones. Diction was on point and syntax well done! I enjoyed this quite a lot :D Good work!

[Ranger Kessel]

I like this. I can relate. A great write. Thanks for sharing! Nice use of rythym too!

[Siegfried]

Satin thoughts, lingering expectations, saliva abundant as wishes become fantasies.

Absence making the heart fond...well done.

[Adam Adams]

"Hold me closer inhale me through". Very sensual line. Liked the imagery of love & emotions; longings & feelings; hopes & dreams; visions & fantasy. Rhythmically beautiful.

[wordman]

loved this write of passion and longing

[Amy]

Longing for the one you love can be a very difficult experience. this totally explains what the writer is going through. I love the use of rhyme. Good write.

[WILDERNESS]

Nice.......... captures the Longing perfectly.........

[S.F]

Truly captivating. I loved it, especially the verse : "Longing for the touch of your hand
As the sea longs for its sand". Good job!