Endless Night

break up again haha but better

My body is numb

My soul yearns for you

As my heart is broken.

 

Time goes by

Like day and night...

My friends wonder if I'll ever be alright.

 

You were my life

My endless night

Everything about you made me smile.

 

I cannot think

I cannot breathe

I cannot live...for my reason left.

 

I know you'd hate

My life this way

But can't you see...

Do you still care for me?

 

You were my life

My endles night

Death shall come...

Why should I fight?

Reviews

[becca]

I really relate to the feeling in this poem, the poems that I've written have a similar message and feel to them.

[hope.]

my favorite stanza is the last one! this poem is so good.! (: i love it. but its sad. and i know how it feels. you did good

[Natalie.]

I like this a lot...but it reminds me of Twilight for some reason haha

[Comatose]

Aww, this is so sweet and sad. Great choice of words!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow i can relate to this so much...... good write

[shane]

brilliant
you really express your thoughts and emotions well in this, describes break ups very well
shane =]

[Lexi =]]

you write real good you express your emotions really good.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very nicely done... very sad and melancholy but well expressed.

[Sarah]

i like this alot

[Rayin]

I like the stanza set up you have going on
and the sneaky repetition in the 4th stanza gives it more emotional emphasis ^^