Knowing

Finally getting it..

I saw the heart pick the flower as the wind started to blow

Then soft cries,listen,distinct,tender eyes tarnished by a woe

Petals were counted one by one,

He loves me,He loves me not,He loves me

Until all but one were plucked

Gently the flower was laid to rest,one petal intact

"He loves me not."

Author's Note

Enjoy.

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

So sad but maybe you started with the wrong one

tate

[qaralynn]

aawh this is so sad..
great write

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

Short, but packed with imagery. Very nice! You prove it doesn't take the verbose in order to evoke a feeling. So much was conveyed in seven lines. Great work!

[Jason]

Thiss was terrific! I love this one.

[Anna]

I love your play on words; it's amazing how you formed an entire plot within 7 lines; it wwas as if I could feel the pain of the character. Anyway, brilliant job! I hope to read more from you!!!

[[ x ] Mayo [ x ]]

=[ awww..sadd..=[ great use of words though =]