Shaman's Vision

This is a poem from the depths of the unknown; deep subconscious. I was absolutely sober and no drugs were involved. I dig deep sometimes and catch some interesting fish.

Sleep with the moon above and the sun in cycle,

around us always

then return to me and be yourself,
for the love I have is no less
and the gratitude doth not wither

I am in you as you are in me,
together we become this trinity;
of family

I will always hold you upon a cross
over for ever
and never lost,

To end the beginning and begin the end in this moment,

is surrealism

Let us not pretend,
for love to be, I Am, and not just me, but you again,

Cometh forth
Oh lovely one,
become to me
as thy Son

Followed only
by her Moon,
and he who jumped over, which called her forth; in cycle

All these miseries and all these kin, will never bring us back again,
so tell me when you will eat and sit with us... within

The Druids corner, the Shamans vision,

As I fall down the hill or off the cliff, I wonder about the meaning of drugs and myth,
Excuse me, can't you see that I am in company  of you, and too,
The gods who call themselves forth through us?

Only- and only us,
to be
something
greater:

A version of each other, incarnate of a virgin

life abated

Reviews

[613]

I'm Jewish, so a lot of the references to Christianity I get, just don't quite understand.

This read well though.

- Brittney

P.S. If you wouldn't mind reviewing my work, I'd truly appreciate it. Trying to get one step closer to publishing; but can't do that without your help!

[modtoddinc]

I was raised with a Christian understanding, then rejected it. At that point I began a journey of study in all the religions of the world. I am not claiming to understand everything, but I have been to Israel, and experienced Judaism personally. I have since come to understand, or perhaps interpret is a better word, that every religion works if taken from a psychological, metaphorical view point... therefore I accept everything, and try to live into who I AM. (Exodus 3: 14) As for the poem, as I said in the quotation, it is deep within my subconscious and I can't definitively define the meaning... hence: Shaman's Vision. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I will return the favor.

~peace, Todd

[613]

Ah, gotcha. & thanks!

[RiverRei]

I like this a lot. I'm not all that religious but I enjoyed reading this. One suggestion is I don't think it's supposed to be "Cometh forth"...I'm 85% sure it's supposed to be "Come forth"...but then again I have no idea when it comes to this genre lol. Overall it is wonderful. Thank you for sharing!

[dan]

Todd, this defies (and I'm sure that it was intended) a concrete definition; to pick apart each line and try to say, "Well, this line means.....?" is fruitless. These types of writes (in which I engage frequently) are to be read straight through, the whole way...then the reader sits and asks, "How does this make me feel? What is the message?" And even after doing so, the reader may realize that the message is NOT the ultimate goal intended. It is the JOURNEY toward the penultimate message that should be examined for clues. Which sends the reader back to read it again...and isn't that the point? Great write, Todd! take care...dan

[modtoddinc]

I like and agree with your review whole-heartedly Dan. Thank you for taking the time to read my poetry.

~peace, Todd

[Michelle Coleman]

Honestly, i felt confused reading this poem. You have titled it "Shaman's Vision," yet it reads like Christain literature. Shamans and Christains are very different. I see no reference to shamanism at all.

I am not sure who the narrator is or who he is speaking to or in what context. Is it God talking to Jesus? Is it a love poem? Where do drugs and myth comes in? Or is this how you view shamanism?

Sorry. I am just very confused.

[modtoddinc]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poetry. I am sorry you found this piece confusing... This write was done from a deep state of inner consciousness and written in a stream of consciousness form... I just poured out all the thoughts onto the page in the order they occurred to me... very little editing... and as always I leave interpretation to the reader. When I read it I see much more than any one faith, and in no way am I attempting to describe any faith or practice... the reference to Shamanism is the attempt to reach an altered state of consciousness, without substances, and channel my spirit into poetic view... any meaning beyond that is open to interpretation.

~peace, Todd

[Michelle Coleman]

I understand the stream ofconscous thought put into writing. I also find value in reaching a state of a deep state of inner consciousness without the need for drugs. This is something I strive for, myself.

With that said... Shamanism is quite sacred, encompassing particular responsibilities and goals. I suppose one could consider Christ a shaman of sorts back in the day. He had visions, healed the sick, went on a vision quest. There is still a whole more to being a shaman. I suppose, it is your title I have an issue with. It feels dishonest.

[modtoddinc]

Well I assure you that no dishonesty is intended. I am very familiar with Shamanism, and have much respect for all spiritual beliefs and expressions, as well as having high integrity for my own craft and all artistic freedom. I apologize for any offenses.

-peace, Todd

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poetry. I have study many religions. Even spend time with Naguals (Another term for Shaman). I use the herbal cures.
"Only- and only us,
to be
something
greater:"
I believe we open our eyes,mind and thoughts to understand this world. The above lines was strong and logical. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[modtoddinc]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poetry.

~peace, Todd

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[wordman]

sounds like god is dealing with you in this write

[modtoddinc]

Thank you for taking the time to read my work.

~peace,Todd

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Maumil Mehraj]

To be honest, I didn't connect it with any particular religion. But how I interpreted it was that you were in a state of being. It seemed as though you were connected with a sort of energy which you yourself aren't acquainted with as yet, but still believe in it.
The poem was surreal and magical...great work
Maumil

[modtoddinc]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I agree with your interpretation. I was not attempting to write from any one perspective, but rather from an inner state as you have said. The interpretation is left to the reader.

~peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Nice write! Definitely a creative piece my friend. I got all the Christian things in this... like how you said in response to Brittney... you have experienced all these things and chose to accept everything. I also would say I accept everything... would consider myself Christian still. Awesome write... always good when it sparks thought :)

[modtoddinc]

Thought is the key to understanding. Thank you for taking the time and consistently reviewing my work.

~peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Always... I got you buddy!