Shelter from the storm

The beginnings of a lyric, perhaps…

A light shines in the distance there 

Storms rage among these stones

But, there shines welcome…

Shelter from the storm

Rising strong, oft threatened

Still standing in the distance

Surviving, waiting in welcome…

Shelter from the storm

Author's Note

This one is unfinished, I think…

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"come in she said i'll give ya, shelter from the storm"

"and the deputy walks on hard nails and the preacher rides a mount, nothing really matters much it's doom alone that counts" (dylan)

but there is that light in the distance, always...there is that refuge from the deluge...if we are patient and determined, we can find it.

i like this...and would like to see where you might take it...although you know me, and the whole less is more thing....i feel this allows me to travel as far as the storm will take me.

[MomzillaNC]

Yeah, I feel the same usually, “Less is more.” I think it’s close to finished. Maybe one more stanza to round it out for a lyric, or maybe just a chorus…

Thanks for your input. “but there is that light in the distance, always...there is that refuge from the deluge...if we are patient and determined, we can find it.” This comment has me thinking about this again…

[Confuser]

I love it; the theme and the beginning of a great chorus: Shelter from The Storm. Rob Thomas, great songwriter of Matchbox 20 (you probably know) said, write what they want to hear. You just did it! Now, let's get to the bridge, HA - want to hear this on Soundcloud; your voice is absolutely beautiful! Thank you. Dale

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Confuser]

Y/W....Sorry my comments are "FEATURED" was not my intent; talked more about other stuff! But I do want to hear the song!

[MomzillaNC]

IDK if it will ever make it to an actual song.

[Confuser]

Oh, but it can!! The chorus is fabulous.....and stone...home....belong...especially Christian or Country. Great start. I love music. Anyway.....

[MomzillaNC]

:) :)

[Confuser]

..........:]:]:

[Confuser]

I see this as God our Lord; and I love it...it would also be a beautiful hymn...It can go on...or stay as it is: Reminds me of God's presence in my life. I hope more people will read. Thank you Momzilla NC:]Dale

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks for the reread, C

[Confuser]

You're welcome. Have a wonderful day.

[MomzillaNC]

:) :)

[Confuser]

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[Terpsichore]

I like the theme. Loving arms, the welcoming warmth of home, it matters not, we all need shelter from the storm. T

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Lizardo]

I do like this poem
Specially the theme to shelter from the storm
Good poem!

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. I hope you'll still like it as much when it's finished…

[MsJewel]

Unfinished perhaps, and yet quite inspirational.

:) Julie

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you.

[Chuba kichu]

Need some lines to fill the cap. Still it rhymes well.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. Yes, it's still unfinished. I'm working on a drawing that I hope will inspire the rest of the poem.

[Chuba kichu]

Thats cool. Carry on :D May the force be with you. Haha

[MomzillaNC]

:) ;)

[hardeep sabharwal]

A short and positive write, I think you can write it little longer,, overall a fine job here, :)

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks :)

[Marie]

I agree with Pryde. Something about a citadel or a tower, maybe...

[MomzillaNC]

I'm actually envisioning a house, almost lost to view in the distance, but with a light shining through a stormy night. I'm think of sketching or drawing something. But, yes, something about the place of shelter seems appropriate. Thank you.

[Pryde Foltz]

Rising strong, oft threatened
Still standing in the distance
Surviving, waiting in welcome…
Shelter from the storm

Yeah perhaps a central stanza that strays some from the pattern … as it stand though the alliteration is great.

[MomzillaNC]

Thanks. Y'know, I didn't even notice the alliteration. How did I miss that? Anyway I'm still thinking about this one. Maybe some sketching will inspire…

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think it is complete now… short but exudes so much positivity.

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you. It certainly stalled. Maybe it is finished. I just have ruminate upon for a bit, I guess.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

If you can't think of anything else then it is finished :)

[MomzillaNC]

It doesn't always work that way. Shariara's Lament took 30 years to complete! :D