Absent father

Who was he

Falling Falling into an allusion of a life that could never be,faded wasted years down the drain lost at sea. Do you see me father I am watching you do you hear me father I am telling you can you hold me father I need you. But his addiction is his child and he is lost to you. Oh faded wasted yrs down the drain of a life that could never be. But this my dear father well not be me.

Author's Note

Needs help

Reviews

[angel]

OK, help:
Illusion, with an I, not allusion. Next problem; punctuation. It should read like this:

"Falling, Falling, into an illusion of a life that could never be,faded, wasted years down the drain, lost at sea. Do you see me, Father? I am watching you. Do you hear me, Father? I am telling you. Can you hold me, Father? I need you. But his addiction is his child, and he is lost to you. Oh, faded, wasted years, down the drain of a life that could never be. But this, my dear Father, will not be me.

You just need to learn to punctuate. And, if you say, "My father gave me this," you don't capitalize the word 'father' when it is not the first word in the sentence. However, when substituting the word 'father' for a name, you capitalize, just as you would a name; "What's wrong, Father? You look troubled.
Also, capitalize when it is a title, like when referring to a oriest,
or a character like Father Time.
Hope this was helpful.

[Monta rico]

Thankyou so much very helpful, the funny thing is my husband is an English teacher,
But I get so embarrassed about the level I’m at so it makes it easier to learn and talk to strangers this makes so much more sense 😀

[angel]

Surprise--I used to be an English teacher, also. Glad to meet you, Monta rico.

[Monta rico]

Insecure about sharing but would like to learn to write my truth