This Wall

This is for all the soldiers that feel a little down.

A poem with feeling?

Dieing on your sword.

A poem with meaning.

A child's prayer.

The walls push but I push back.

The clock ticks, but I talk

I walk, while they run

its fun watching them attack.

Me, I am

He is, Your are

gone too far, gone to wide

May the demons swallow my pride.

No one is going to tear down this wall.

It shall not fall

despite what you say.

It still stands tall today.

I AM DR. PEPPER

And my words will make you feel better.

Author's Note

I would love it if you left your thoughts. Stay strong my fellow soldiers.

Reviews

[Cecelia]

Intriguing....can be read many ways...each reading pulling in a different direction. Mark of good writing...always leave them wondering and wanting to know more...this fills the bill..

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great tribute to our soldiers! they need our prayers daily. Excellent poem

[K.C. Zbryk]

a nice write, and it's refreshingto hear someone take the stand, "no one is going to tear down this wall" a strong stance is all that will survive the future.

[Thea]

Really fits the soldiers part...Nice poem... ^^

[Alex Thomas]

I like the occasional rhyme within. It shows the strength and power of the writer, some of which is bestowed upon the reader. I saw a few typos in it. Third stanza, second line, should be "you are" And in the line after that, It should be "gone too wide". Overall, a clever poem. Almost introductory. And I'm not sure that you may make me feel better. I'm so used to poetry tearing me down. Again, great job on this piece. Highly powerful.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Very clever and witty, Doc.