Movement of the Sun

the melancholy days full
tumbling through the Sandymount Strand;
whispering the wind that fears the sky:
  mourning lustre of days hence.
 
the wind is he who waits
in throughout the Sky;
downing golden
  Tonatiuh
shields the heaven
  Tollan.

whirling around the large strand,
past the old days brook,
amber looks, and sees:
  memories affinity.

Reviews

[Hatchling]

Beautiful poem Randall! I like how you repeated some of the lines. Keep up the great work

[emmajoy]

'the melancholy days full ~ tumbling through the Sandymount Strand; ~ whispering the wind that fears the sky: ~ mourning lustre of days hence.' Whether intentionally included or not, I like the repeated use of the M letter - it somehow creates a low musical hum.

There's a scene here, and, beautiful. 'Memories infinity'

[Mr.Boffin]

thanks :) thats what i was going for with the repeated use or certain letters and words

[Anand Sehgal]

whirling around the large strand,
past the old days brook,
amber looks, and sees:
memories affinity.

lovely lovely imagery. Loved your metaphors :)

[Blank]

This is beautiful! If I'm honest I'm not sure what it's about but it reminds me of mythology or a fable to explain the seasons, the name Tonatiuh I've seen before but I don't remember what culture it's from... but all that aside, the imagery is very vivid and lovely and the flow to this is very nice, moving which really enhances your description of the wind.

Wonderful write, thank you for sharing!

[Mr.Boffin]

Tonatiuh was the Aztec Sun god....different versions and different stories mention Tollan and the one I like refers to Tollan as a utopian (heaven)
city.

Thank you for the review! :)

was going for a mythological/fable type of feel!

[Bob Sherunkle]

Your words do paint a very vivid picture.Very Beautiful.Good work sir!

[Ruth]

This is really beautifully done...you have wonderful talent...the description here is awe inspiring and blissfully executed...am sharing this! x

[Mr.Boffin]

thanks for the kind words....just made my day! :)

[Ruth]

So welcome!