Girl, Woman, Goddess

I saw a contest for PAS5ION and there's only one true passion for me. Isn't it obvious?

How knit we are and more because of it

How right it is that we are together

No more living in a vacuum as love spills over the edges and down

Our children, the love within us will grow when we've gone

Jackie, my soul is no longer whole without you

Reviews

[Prose-full]

"No more living in a vacuum as love spills over the edges and down"---this is genius...
love your passion..absolutetly great emotion in these 5 lines...
thank you for sharing this..

This is beutiful. I thought you wrote a perfect poem about that perfect someone! Great work as always.

[BLFK]

Your poetry is beautiful. . .
Capturing the feeling of your love and passion.
I find this to be very inspiring for someone who is not in a relationship yet.
It plucks at the heart, saying, 'Wait, and watch for the perfect one.'
This seems to give an idea at the reward of waiting.
Beautiful.

[Jacqueline]

I liked that you chose the word "knit" instead of "close" or similar...knit gives you the feeling of intertwining. You show your obvious devotion and love-as well as passion. And, the object of your desire and I have the same name (Jackie's my nick name) so it made it more whimsical to read.

[Kelley Pascoe]

I loved this MrJodie! Very heart wrenching at the end.
I loved your line....

"No more living in a vacuum as love spills over the edges and down
Our children"

That was a great line!!!!
Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost