Saudades

Alluvion of emotions,
evicted peace of mind.
Toil under impeding memories.

The long journey back to station,
burden of longing in hand,
It overwhelms my boundaries .

None proffers alleviation,
sensation of being mislaid,
building castles of miseries.

World I crave tears hold in reflection.
Words I etch seem flawed and frayed.
Woeful bids once more I perceive.

Often question my intentions,
They lack purpose or perfection.

Author's Note

Photo: county side in India.

Reviews

[angel]

That is a lovely photo; thanks for bringing it to my attention.
Now for your poem.
I feel futility, loss, misdirection, and conflict.
Being able to make the reader FEEL SOMETHING is the purpose of poetry. This piece meets that goal.
My favorite phrase: "building castles of misery".
Great job,Mrudula!
Keep writing.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Angel, for your kind words of encouragement. I appreciate your review very much.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and wonderful words shared my friend.
"World I crave tears hold in reflection.
Words I etch seem flawed and frayed.
Woeful bids once more I perceive."
Most of us know the words above. Too late for take-backs of words and bad actions. Thank you Mrudula for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you John. Your thoughts on my words mean a lot to me.

[Sami Khalil]

Masterful expression even in Portugese. This deep state of longing bring out castles of nostalgia. Raw emotions can expose deep wounds of the past.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear Sami for your wonderful review.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome dear Mrudula...

[An owl on the moon]

Saudades... this was the first Portuguese word I learned... the missing... the aching... the longing that cannot be satisfied. How your thoughts carry that longing across the vast waters of your world. The long journey, oh it seems endless at times. Endless. Desejando-lhe tanta paz, meu querido. Como espero que você esteja dançando lá mesmo nas sombras. Um grande abraço.

[Mrudula Rani]

Oi querido, muito obrigada por sua palavras lindos. Lembrar de àquele canção... saudade não ter idade? Quase todos canção em português tem a palavras "saudade & coração"! Obrigada de novo. Uma grande abraço.

[An owl on the moon]

Eu ouço fado português quase todos os dias ... e sinto a saudade profunda lá. Que sua nova semana traga música de saudade alegre, minha querida. Um grande abraço.

[Chris Shaw]

Beautifully composed M. A real treat to read. So good to see you back here.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you, C. You are very kind!

[andrew mitchell]

Very nicely written almost like a sermon

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Andrew, that is very uplifting to know.

[CD Campbell]

It's exciting to see you experiment like you do. You don't want sit on your haunches and write the same ole thing 10 times. Thats awesome. Heavy stuff here with heavy language. Were the half rhymes of mind and hand intentional? Sometimes poets do that to throw people off. Line 10 i would put a comma after world and "to" inbetween tears and hold. I say that lightly. I dont like to change others work. I enjoyed it. CD

[Mrudula Rani]

Iam fascinated by the way you write poetry CD, inspired by wonderful writers like you, I attempt at expressing my thoughts ... I look far ward to your reviews with such an anticipation, and I love reading your extraordinary writings. Thank you.

[CD Campbell]

That's a nice thing to say. You are welcome.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Fascinating photo.
Have been told it is a burden to see too much.
Your insight seems painfully profound.
Your poetry, truly exceptional!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Jimmy, I am mopping around with homesick for India ever since we got back from there .

[Neville]

This is superb poetry & true... I have waited and waited for these words... :) Neville

[Mrudula Rani]

Você é uma amor. Adoro você meu querido! I think my administration and affection for you best expressed in Português.Thank you my dear, dear friend.

[Neville]

is it possible to smile and blush at the same time... N