Consecution

From
there, don't know
how I swung by here.
From there to hither long way!
Trip

Time
Even though
It's only measured
In hours and minutes, feels like
Sea

I
had to swim
a river of time
and turf to get here for now
Fate

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

This is a real philosophical poem. I like the way it has been structured.

well done

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear BlackPrince for the review. I am so glad you are back.

[Eilis]

I had to look up the word consecution, that’s a new one to me. It describes the poem perfectly, in my mind. I like learning new words.

What caught my eye about this poem was the way the words could have different meanings according to which words they were paired with. The way each stanza ends with a significant word that lends extra weight or varied meaning to the poem. That’s great craft, but also I just like the way it all sounds. The words bouncing off of each other like music.

Also, loved the image of swimming in a river of time and turf. Really enjoyed this one, Mrudula!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Eilis for your lovely thoughts, I love your reviews. Your knowledge and generous point of view is absolutely wonderful. Thanks again.

[Relic]

Time and life join and we each have a different route through the calm, or tumultuous seas. Who knows where it all winds up.

[Mrudula Rani]

Like two ships on high seas ... may be for a brief moment we might meet and make an impression that lasts a life time? Thank you Tim. For getting my imagination running pleasantly.

[Sami Khalil]

You describe marvelously the origin, the trip, the destination and above all the hands of fate in all of that. We arrived and now we wander and wonder...Your pen is mighty.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank my dear Sami, for your lovely thoughts and for understanding mine. Shokran jazeelan.

[Sami Khalil]

Salam wa mahaba to you. You are welcome...

[Mrudula Rani]

Tudo de bom para você ( wishing you all the best).

[Sami Khalil]

:::::::::::)))))))

[Neville]

deliberately determined to make me jealous of your pen.. aint'cha M.. very clever indeed.. N x

[Mrudula Rani]

My dear Neville, if I am any good at this it is because of the wonderful influence of brilliant writers like you my dear friend. Thank you for your kind words.

[Neville]

what a delightful thing to suggest... am sure you would have made it on ya own though.. all my money is on you... N

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear friend. Uma abraço.

[Neville]

always a pleasure M....