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Nothing is worth this waiting,

Not even for the next painting.

I just hold my breath and count to ten

Hoping everything will be wonderful again

But knowing it never will be

It doesn't take a great mind to see

That I will never be able to breathe

Why doesn't someone just sheathe

This sword that has stabbed me

So many times while I try to see

If anyone really does care

I guess its just not fair

That some of us can find someone

To wipe away our tears

And take away our fears

But no matter what,

We always get swept away

Falling on our knees hoping not to sway

And let ourself slowly fade

I'm not afraid,

To take this blade,

And to be sure I have always stayed

And always will.

My heart will always be filled,

And will never be killed.

Author's Note

This was written for someone at a very rough time. I woke up late one night and as always, I had something on my mind and wrote it down.

Reviews

[Jon Gary Frost]

I enjoyed the feeling of this. The imagery was well done and the emotions were strong and well expressed.

I did feel, as the reader, a little bogged down with the rhyming. It left me with a feeling that had you thrown rhyme to the wind, the feelings which were already very strong would have become even more so.

This was a strong emotional piece. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

[talulu love]

it rhymes really good

[magicman]

it expresses true emotion. I like it

[Adelia Alighieri]

I like your veracity, to be honest.
The poem communicates your genres..The sword and the sheathe part was good. =) Kudos.
P.S.
I'm not good at giving reviews. =P

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I like it. Can't really see anything wrong with it since there's so many different styles, but its very relatable. Keep it up