Porcelain

It's like I'm ill and every orifice of my body oozes,
Every porous piece of porcelain shedding, faltering into unmade purity.

I see it laying there trying to pick itself up,
Trying to find some chemical adhesive that will maybe make it stick.

Trying,
Trying,
Trying.

Author's Note

Went through a difficult stage filled with self hate and drug use. This is one of the only things i wrote during those times.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You capture despair within the lines of this verse...just as a reader you feel you are the words going through the struggle...just gets at you...the whole write is screaming and yet has no where to go...but keep going in the lines and you may the declaration with the word:

Trying,
Trying,
Trying.

Yet...it has control over you...

[Mulligitawny]

I really like this comment, i feel that you can feel what i was feeling.. lol. Thanks for the feedback, i really appreciate it!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

YOU'RE WELCOME...

[anumenon]

i am intrested the correct word is the lines which is capturing my mind is not the poem the authors note, there is old saying in my village we can take drugs but the drugs will not take us,
have a good day friend

[Mulligitawny]

Thanks so much for your comment, i appreciate your encouraging words! Congratulations on your sobriety, i am sure you can keep the upper hand on this never ending battle! I am glad this could connect with you on such a level. Thanks again for your time, it means the world to me! :)

[LJW]

You have no idea how much I can relate to this. I am a recovering addict just coming back after a three-year relapse. I was clean for 16 years previous to that. I watched myself... I felt myself chip away. Like pure white porcelain that was horribly filthy at the same time.

What I liked about this is that it wasn't cheesy. it wasn't overwrought or overstated. You didn't mention drugs once. You wrote about how you felt in an artistic way using phrases no one else has ever spoken.

Original, meaningful work.

Unique. .. the last three lines gave me goosebumps.

[J. Kell]

Trying to find some chemical adhesive that will maybe make it stick. This line is awesome...i have had my struggles with addiction so I really feel this. Great short poem. The imagery of the porcelain, it made me think of a doll coming apart awesome.

[DW Collins]

I particularly enjoyed line 3.