In the Gloaming

In the Gloaming

 

 

I wait by the window

for your return,

like wilting flowers awaiting sunlight…

in the gloaming.

 

Reviews

[C]

That's really plain yet creative poem! The words are lesser than twenty but it's meaningful. I wish I could also write some short innovative words.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Just keep at it...it will come! ...thank you!

[Dara]

Your words and the image speak volumes, Kelly. I love this sad but beautiful poem. I definitely agree with the others that the word "gloaming" depicts a wonderful emotion.

[Kelly Scheppers]

After what I have read here, you're certainly right, Dara! ...thank you, my friend!

[sereenaoutloud]

Oh you are the master of such few words that say so much! I am in awe how you do this girlie!.. Love the metaphor use,,,i can clearly see the person sitting in an chair by the window.. sitting up straighter each time a car light flashes past the window only to feel that drop of disappointment every time it is not them!!
Beautiful, sad and brilliant !!

[Kelly Scheppers]

...the heart even seems to flutter a little more, with each passing car...thank you, Sereena!

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot in the short poem. All of us need the sunlight of love and kindness. Thank you Kelly for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kelly Scheppers]

...thank you, John...I appreciate that!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Kelly.

[andrew mitchell]

Beautiful! The word Gloaming reminded me of a song my Grandpa had by Sir Harry Lauder a 78 called "roaming in the gloaming". A simple yet so reaching out kind of a poem (3d)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I love writing a poem from a single word! Thank you, Andrew! How wonderful for me to conjure up a memory for you!

[Princess]

short, simple, and beautiful.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...thank you!

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
Very sad, but I'm sure that this happens to several:(
Wording gives a clear picture of sadness,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Kelly Scheppers]

I must admit, I felt very blessed when I wrote this, for ten more followed in a span of an hour and 45 minutes! That set a record for me! Thank you, Jamestown...may you be blessed as well!

[Roland Petrov]

Lovely micro poem. The suggestion, I suppose, is that you've waited all day. "Gloaming" is such a lovely word; I'm glad that you wrote a poem featuring it.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...it is, isn't it? I couldn't resist building a poem around it! Thank you, Roland!