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Petals on toes
Delicious home
Sourcream foam
Whipped into anthills
For you to suck on

Laden tongue
With a love bud
Blisters out
Through skin cuts

And chin chipped
By salivary flow
Watery squirts
Through a projectile hose
Landing on n*****s
Of a clarinet's bone

Tulips in fields
Oblique valleys
And fine follicles
Bud in cheeks

Reviews

[Chris]

Everything from eating a fruit to deeply sexual play on images. Well written in either case BUT seems to me letting your reader define YOUR thought as they see fit is kind of weak.

[Kate]

Not sure what you mean by "letting your reader define your thought as they see fit is kind of weak".
Thank you for all your comments. I honestly would not look for anything deep in my poems. I love words and they somehow come into my head and I just put them dow on a piece of paper. I started writing poems because it somehow came to me, it somehow happened. I also wanted to practise in this way my vocab. Whatever it comes out of it, comes out of it. I let the reader decide.
I never expect people to read my poetry, but it´s great that sometimes someone reads them instead of just my friends.
I upload the poems here to store them and not losing them.
Don´t be afraid to write whatever you would like to write. Whatever your sense of humour, I will accept it :)

Thank you for criticism. I really love to get some feedback from strangers :)

[Chris]

Fair enough. Your use of word choice is accurate and inarguable. Privately, I would discuss with you other thoughts, publicly it may feel more an attack - which it isn't. I do bite but not meanly.

Many ask for comments/reviews - some get offended if the other didn't live up to the personal view of their work the author had. College Level/Uni-words are one thing whose use clearly put people ill-at-ease. Not everyone knows or remembers them and still others understand them with a definition under another profession.

You're bright, knowledgeable, articulate. Show more confidence in your ability to interest others with what is behind your eyes than the sheepskin you've almost earned. Remember - not a personal dig ...just giving an insight writer-to-writer.

[Kate]

Thank you 😊 what do you mean by sheepskin?

[Chris]

Uni diploma