Can You Feel It?

The winds whispers
ruffle the trees leaves
while the midnight moon smiles.
Can you feel it?

The early morning dew
quenches a blade of grass's thirst
while the moon and sun cross paths.
Can you feel it?

The late morning heat
tickles a horse's back
while the sun brightens the day.
Can you feel it?

The afternoon rain
sprinkles here and there
while the sun plays hide-and-seek with clouds.
Can you feel it?

The purple's, pinks, and blues
coloring the evening sky appear
while the sun says good-bye and the moon says hello.
Can you feel it?

The circle of life.

Author's Note

Thanks so much!! (:

For reading my poem!!((:

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

I can feel it. A beautiful write.

With Love,

Jaidyn

[red_saphyre]

This is a really good write.. i enjoyed reading it, as I alwaysenjoy your poetry.

[David W Moore III]

Very nice. I like the word placement as well drawing you with it across the page. Nice imagery. Comforting in some way.

[SexyParadise]

yes, i feel it. haha. Very visually stimulating.

[FlawedByDesign]

Truly beautiful imagery and very descriptive :)
There are so many ways to describe the circle of life and you have picked the not-so-obvious ways in filling that circle.
I've seen this form in one of Cheyenne's recent poems, but I think she got it from you; I think that is great flattery, because it works.

Nicely done.

btw...I agree with Abdul, in that the first stanza needs to be reworked as it does not make sense the way it is.

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

I love how it's not just written, you made a pattern thing! I love the end and the poem itself is titled Can You Feel It?. I absolutely loved it! ;p

[Liza]

you definitely see it & feel it and did a wonderful job in translating it .
" the landscape belongs to those who see it - ralph waldo emerson"

[Faye]

It has very strong imagery, it is very beautiful. I have never looked at the circle of life in that perspective before, it's refreshing.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

so beautiful i enjoyed reading this going into my favorites i love it. god bless

[Cassi M.]

This is such a delightful poem! It is so beautiful to read. Very good piece.:D