Paradise

in memory of my Sister we will see each other again.

Paradise
By Donald Lee Murrill
June 16,2011

...God extended his arms as she walked in them, He swept her into his love as he wiped the tears from her eyes. I weep quietly for I know that she will soon be dancing in this same dress like a princess in the sun light.

God smiles down to her and states;

I LOVE YOU PLEASE DON’T CRY I WILL WATCH OVER THE ONES YOU LEFT BEHIND FOR I AM GOD WHOM GAVE HIS SON JESUS CHRIST SO YOU CAN DANCE IN THE SUN LIGHT.

　

THERE IS NO SHADE TO THICK FOR I SEE THE LIGHT BEHIND THOSE CRYING EYES YOUR BEAUTY WILL FOREVER SHINE SO DANCE IN THE SUN LIGHT

 

Reviews

[afra]

simply beautiful ....great write

[RachelReaper]

I know how it is to lose someone you care about, but like you said, the important thing to remember is that you will see them again. Filled with emotion.

[murrill]

I realy respect you Honesty on my grammar think you and I will fix it I am glad you like this poem, this poem was published in a book called Star in our hearts, it was a great peice. the words come to me in a dream I was thinking of my sister who sadly lost her life in a fire alone with my Nephew It was a tragic time in our life and I had no way of expressing what I felt. This is were I started writing again after so long of abscents.

[Brittany]

This is a lovely piece, full of love and emotion. Touching.

May I make a few grammar suggestions...
God extended his arm(s) as she walked(ed) in them,
You change tense from the first sentence to the second
princes or princess
gods or God's