Influenced Thoughts

The first stanza to a poem I wrote. Should I leave it as is or go on?

 

Young boy I miss you

I'm really sorry I ever dissed you

It wasn't your sneakers

It wasn't your features

 

I have no value

 

Author's Note

Any comment is appreciated.

Reviews

[Junert]

I understand the feeling of having someone so right you feel you are not worthy of them. It's a great poem.

[BriBri]

Thank you so much! That's exactly what I was trying to potray

[kingblaq]

Wow! The last line is classic!!

[ayele marie dalmeida]

I think you should go on, this is very beautiful already, and i love to read more.

[paul]

the last line makes this poem for me, though
i'd like to see the rest

[Raymond Federle]

Wonderful free verse. You should try writing some song lyrics. :)