A Winter's Day

Looking out the window

The window is not mine, oh no,
And neither is the scene beyond.
But I rest my eyes here far enough
For all that in me to respond.

Past the plated glassy surface
Is a vast expanse of fallen field.
Spreading wide like Cheshire's smile,
A hefty profit does it yield.

Looming high, a winter sky
Of icy white and solemn grey
Looks upon the scene below
As children out to play.

Here I sit, in warm bedroom,
With fingers flying mad.
I must remember to look out
And in nature, be glad.

Author's Note

yep, just wrote it XD I did it for a contest on allpoetry, then checked the rules and it called for no rhyme. So I took it out of the contest. Oh well, I like it.

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

Really good rhyme and meter, also generates excellent imagery. Nice work.

[Mark]

I enjoyed this wistful glance into the late-Fall reaping season, and into the too-rapidly fading childhood memories of one very special young woman!
You might want to look at my poem "Snowbound Morning" for some similar thoughts!

[Thomas B. Buckman]

Very well done... It puts me in that moment, watching you write this.
Awesome.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like it too! Some good word choices like

With fingers flying mad.

The window is not mine, oh no,
And neither is the scene beyond.

I must remember to look out
And in nature, be glad.

[Alexander Scott]

I like it too. But I think I may be becoming a bit biased even though it's only the second poem of yours I've read. Publish a book. I'll buy it!

[LeeLee Ryder]

Wonderful ES
A winters' day is a playful and meaningful writ..
i love the Chesire smile ref.. & how kids can enjoy themselves when skies are dismally grey
ANd the ending...so true... nature's GOOD and so is CREATIIVITY... THANK GOD FOR WINDOWS..
Happy holidays
Snow fairy LeeLee

[An owl on the moon]

I just love the world in winter and you capture so well the feel and flow... Looking out the window, you show us the frozen scene with children bringing the movement and joy. Beautifully done!

[Ed Hart]

who said that scene isn't yours?