Reach For My Broken Ashes...

I wrote the March 6th 2006. I was fresh out of school and had began dabbling more into poetry in 2005. meh this was a contest prompt. Got bronze.

Focus on the words I declare...
Visualize my thoughts within a glare.
Feel my vibration under your skin,
And let my ashes seep deep within.

Take a handful of me and sprinkle me on the ground,
Make the earth and I new enemies, forever to be bound.
Feel the rush of my caress in your hair,
Know that I am a figment of your imagination that only you will hear.

Place me upon your tongue and taste my broken body,
Stretch mutilated hands out to me with great expectation of odyssey.
Smell the sweet fragrance of fire upon my flesh,
With eager hands, my broken ashes, you may secretly molest.

Reviews

[biggerthenu]

THIS IS A NICE WRITE IT PUT ME DEEP IN THOUGHT ON WHERE U WERE COMING FROM I REALLY LIKED IT BUT THIS ENDING IS A LITTLE TRICKY TO ME I WOULD LOVE TO KNOW IF U CAN REMEMBER LOL

[Jason]

I love it! Simple and short but deep. To me its speaks of te heart human wants of physical longing of another, without the emotinal BS
"Take a handful of me and sprinkle me on the ground,
Make the earth and I new enemies, forever to be bound.
Feel the rush of my caress in your hair,
Know that I am a figment of your imagination that only you will hear."

[Holly O'Brien]

Lovely...this put my mind to work but maybe you can explain it to me sometime.

When I started to read it, I just pictured God creating man. But as I read on the tone seemed to become romantic in a sense. In either case, I enjoyed the way this flowed and your wonderful use of words.

Glad you placed in the contest! that's awesome!

[Coyote Poetry]

This poem is amazing with strong statements and words that made me read the poem a few times. Each line making the poem stronger. I like the complete poem. The ending was very good. "With eager hands, my broken ashes, you may secretly molest." A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote