Under the Sun

I can picture you
in a mile long field,
under the Sun- its warmth crab-dancing
on your skin, leaving trails of
freckled kisses
on your nose and cheeks.

Wind in your hair,
and joy in your amber eyes,
I see your fingertips combing
through the daisies,
the grass tickling your bare toes.

And the Sun is just so bright,
It lights up your hair like a halo.
Through the fields,
in your favourite dress
pinwheel in hand,
running so fast, your giggles
chase after you.

Reviews

[Relic]

Being we work by interpretation, this is either about a little girl (your daughter) or about you when you were young. Either way, this is great. I like the repeating w sounds too. It makes the poem whispy to read, encapsulating the warm wind of a summer's day in a big field.

[Moonie]

I build up on a purgatory like happy place, or just a vision of a saintly child.
Thank you for reviewing. I appreciate it!

[john l smith]

this radiates a warm weather glow that is wonderfully accented by that field of daisies
nothing to do but enjoy

[Moonie]

Thank you so much♡

[Daydreamer]

I want to meet you in person someday💜 i love you so much! Most special and truly talented writer i have ever seeen❤

[Moonie]

Heyyy!! Look who's here! ❤❤
I love reading your poetry as well as your reviews!

[Daydreamer]

Always missed and always loved❤ inbox mee

[Robert Strzalko]

Reading this made me think of a little girl playing in a field of flowers and tall green grass on a sunny summer day.

[Robert Strzalko]

I forgot to mention that I liked your Rain Song lyrics on your profile....great song.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

What a beautiful picture of youth and the childlike innocence.

[KCthelastboyscout]

I hope you were smiling wriiting this.Visually expressive imagery.Beautifully written in detail.
A pleasure...

[Moonie]

Thank you so much! I was more sad than smiling when i wrote this though. When I wrote this poem, I had a different vision than what most poets perceived on here. It was supposed to be a tribute to my friend (and my patient) who recently suffered from a miscarriage.
It's amazing how a write can be perceived so differently by different people. Goes to show that most of the poem is written by the reader than by the poet! Thanks again! ❤

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Very sweet wonderful write that leaves touches of warmth and many smiles:)

[wredit.jordan]

Your word choices are so unique. "warmth crab-dancing" and "fingertips combing through the daisies" I've never come across these descriptions before. Very well-written!

[Moonie]

Thank you! "Crab-dancing" sounded quite visual to me, and I wanted to use that phrase in a poem, ever since I thought of it. Glad you took time to notice the little nuances! ❤

[Tom]

The sunshine does bring out the best in all of us and you depict that so exquisitely in creative expression!

and so idyllic given the beautiful summer we are having here.. https://www.bbc.co.uk/weather/2643360

[Moonie]

Thank you so much!

[Chris Shaw]

Lovely expression and imagery. I really enjoyed the read. Thank you.

Chris

[Moonie]

Thank you so much!