The Green Ribbon Band

Some symbolism there.

The moon shines down on barren lands

Where a bare-branched black tree stands

Deep-rooted in the frozen desert sand

Caught on one leafless bough is a ribbon band.

 

It flutters fighting the blowing breeze

That rattles the branches of the tree

But weakens while the winds increase

Stuck in a storm that doesn’t ever cease.

 

The unleashed gusts tear the last bit of green

From the gnarly branch of the nevergreen tree

The storm strips the strip from a plant nearly dead

Taking fibre for fibre, down to the last thread.

 

But the brittle band still clings to the bough

Of the tree without a leaf left to adorn its crown

To add some green to where there is none

That is the reason why the ribbon hangs on.

Author's Note

Dedicated to, inspired by and written for the amazing invisible ninja who, when not invisible, is purple <3
Some symbolism to decipher perhaps.

Reviews

[Ray]

This is incredible ! The only thing you could improve on is avoiding to use the same word : I know that sometimes we want to use the same words twice for whatever reasons, but it would enrich the poem if you used another word for "strips" or "strip". Impressing writing though !

[lee von cleef]

Barb wire, brittle, a stint to save the world blown away,I like your bit of green.

[Nath]

Thanks for the review!
We all need the bit of green for sure.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Gorgeous! A stunning piece so eloquently you have sent a message that pierces within the heart where the "green ribbon" is the Hope and the fight! I love this!

[Nath]

Thanks for the great review, and an excellent interpretation of what the "green ribbon" symbolizes!

[Priscilla Sayers]

:)My pleasure!

[Nath]

^^

[Sophie]

Wow, fantastic poem, I really enjoyed it. I don't think there is anything else to say but well done! Really great poem.

This is 4 of 20 reviews for 1st in Emotional Poetry.

[......]

A very poetic piece, & so nicely written.
You have talent

[Sahar moonlight]

This is really fantastic.
The poem just flows and flows.
Every line getting more interesting.
You wrote it just perfectly!

[Otsana]

This poem is amazing! I love the way you have coloured the ribbon green and made the tree to which it hangs on leafless because it works great with the last two lines of the poem. However, because I know the person it is inpsired by I know that those lines are also a metaphor for what she brings to life and I couldnt agree more. You have really caught the strenght of her character and I love the way you have done it. Great job!

[Cosmic Dreamer]

This is amazing - its the best poem I've read all week I think. Wow. I am speechless :D I agree with Invisible_Ninja, suddenly the poem just hits you. Great poem, well done :)

[Moflo]

I like that you set this up to decipher. The image of green is very important and telling, I believe, and I like how you make it a green ribbon. Good job.

[Invisible_Ninja]

Wow. I'm speechless. Ha but wow yeah that was amazing. I love it I really really do its like woooow just it hits you but yeah wow ha you can tell i don't know what to say :p but I love it. The idea of just clinging on through everything no matter what