Letting Go

rather than cross it out completely, I thought why not change the form...

Letting Go

 

She once held

The moon in her pocket

 

She once wore

The sky in her hair

 

She once placed

My soul in her locket

 

She once pinned

My heart to her sleeve

 

In the end she let go

Of the sky and the moon

 

 To give this body

And mind a reprieve

 

 

Author's Note

just in case you might be wondering, these words no longer fall in the shape of a cross

Reviews

[Lorry]

Words that resonate within more than a few of us will recognise. I am struck by the thought of then and now, and how we can all fill in our own blanks of how this felt to us.
The beauty that is still evident in the thoughts behind each line is striking.

[Neville]

Cheers Lorry.. I was just about to delete these words but decided to merely juggle them a little bit.. another much appreciated visit, so thanks again.. N

[Lorry]

You are very welcome.

[Circe]

Beautiful and clever... the imagery pulls you into this captivating story... the moon and the sky are simply larger than life!

[Neville]

I am a very lucky guy to have you stopping by. Many thanks dear friend x

[The Inner Me]

Simple but beautiful. Nice work.

[Neville]

Bless ya, much appreciated

[highonwords]

i am curious - why is the shape of this poem a 'cross' - i know this is a shape poem, but why did you choose the 'cross' for a shape - about the poem content - she used to love him, but because he couldn't breathe anymore, live anymore in his own world - and we all that little space for our sanity, she let him go - a possessive lover dispossessed

regards,
steph

[Neville]

You are very astute dear poet. Thank you for considering these words and form. The cross appeared from the alignment of words, simple, nothing more curious than that. Hope you are not too disappointed

[highonwords]

i am not disappointed at all - thank you for telling me :)

steph

[Neville]

Okay, no problem but its gotta be our secret, dont want to spoil it for anyone else that might stumble across it...........AGT's N

[Lydia Shutter]

Very interesting shape poem, Neville. The shape would suggest spirituality, but the words suggest a romantic liaison gone wrong. Either way, I enjoyed it. Lydi**

[Neville]

I am grateful to you for stopping for a while and considering this little scribble.... N