Without a Single Word

Inspired by the early works of Robert Herrick 1591 - 1674 of whom I am a longstanding fan.....

Without a Single Word

 

From somewhere in the

Far off distance

She heard a 

Whistle and a humming

So without a word

She promptly

Pulled her dress about

her head

So not to see her lover coming

 

From somewhere

Just outside

The bedroom door

She heard a cough and

Felt her heart a drumming

So without a single word

She removed her dress

And said my darling come in

 

 

 

Author's Note

there was originally going to be three verses...

Reviews

[angel]

Well, then, put in the third! It does sound a bit...incomplete.

[Neville]

there was obviously a good reason I threw the towel in at two.......... but thanks for the visit.... Neville

[Chris Shaw]

This is quite different from you Neville, quite classical in style and I absolutely love it. I will have to look up Robert Herrick to see if I can see his influence on this piece of your writing. Very visual my friend, quite tantalising as well. Well done you, curtsey to you, not just once, but twice. It stands very well with two stanzas in my opinion.

Chris

[Neville]

Why bless you dear Chris.. many thanks.. yes do check him out......Neville

[Chris Shaw]

I needed to be reminded. I have read quite a few of his poems before, but some time ago now. many of them well known. Gather Ye Rosebuds While Ye May, very famous. As are his Julia poems. She must have been very special to him. Classical, lyrical and oh so romantic. He has a strong rhythm in his work, and appears to use ing quite frequently on words endings. I can hear his influence when I read your poem out loud :)) Will read some more of his work later today. Will let you know what his best is in my opinion.

Chris

[Neville]

Gonna have a job beating his Julia ones.. maybe.. N

[Chris Shaw]

You are gonna have to get very sensual. Just read the one about Julia's breast ...............

[Neville]

I did not mean me.. I meant you will have a job finding anything than his Julia ones.....

[Chris Shaw]

There we go talking at cross purposes. Me talking about your writing, you talking about my reading. So you must reckon his Julia ones are best :)

[Neville]

they are very good...

[An owl on the moon]

You create a deep mood of anticipation, soft sounds and moving silences. Too often words can strip a moment of its perfection, though as writers, as lovers of words it's hard to sit in the silences for long.

[Neville]

thank you so much for checking in and leaving such welcome encouragement my friend, tis much appreciated..... Neville

[An owl on the moon]

I appreciate you and your writing deeply, my friend.

[Neville]

Sentiment well and truly reciprocated..... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

I like it like that, leaving us to fill in the blanks. But i am sure you'd fill the gaps in nicely should you choose:)

[Neville]

Oh' yes, indeed.. but the world needs gaps.. how else we gonna get out of here........... cheers Neville

[Fran Marie]

A charming. Vignette ..this not only tells the reader ..it shows us.. ..delightful in its brief description..well done..

[Neville]

You are far too generous for words my friend, but I thank you for it and true.... N

[Fran Marie]

You're welcome ..I could envision the entire scene being played out..

[Neville]

With gratitude, I am indeed overcome...... Neville

[lightsong]

I must agree with Your note, we need a third verse :) it's tempting but leaves us with questions. still I very much liked Your style here, the flow and the simple yet creative words.

[lightsong]

if You don't mind something which came to my mind,

From somewhere
between the panting breaths
She lost her voice,
as He spoke the words
all over Her skin.

[Neville]

Bless ya dear Light, much appreciated....and what poetry you came up with.... post it quick, or it will be nicked by someone N

[lightsong]

all Yours if You wish my friend, I came up with it as a third verse :)

[Neville]

Bless ya my dear friend....

[lightsong]

..... :) .....