The Long Drop

These words are more about self loathing than anything else.. Not my own I hasten to add....honest.. N

The Long Drop

 

I am the long drop

    That wakes you

        In the dead of night

 

I am the dull ache

    You mistook for some

        Kind of heart attack

 

I am that phone call

    You always knew

       You would receive one day

 

I am that voice

     In your head the one that always

          Tells you to jump or burn yourself

 

I am that first grey hair

     The one that caused

         You to panic in the fast lane

 

I am the shadow and unfamiliar

       Sound outside your bedroom door

              When you are home alone

 

I am the discoloured lesion

     You discovered during your last

           Self examination ritual

 

I am the consequence

     Of you daring to walk under ladders

            Without a raincoat or umbrella

 

I am your worst guilt trip

     And the port wine stain on your

              New white blouse

 

I am all the things you love to hate

      So much about yourself

            But can not live without

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Lorry]

This is brilliant. It sounds to my ears, all those little tgings that the poor camel carries, and we keep adding more, until SNAP, broken back. Leading to a serious case of fukitol, thinking the world is conspiring against us and letting our loathing not only grow, but thrive.The term "agg! Get outta my head" springs to mind :)

[Neville]

bow legged camels aint my bag.. I sometimes just have to vent before that critical point.. still it helps that someone else understands... cheers Lorry......

[Chris Shaw]

All those things we fear most, all rolled into one poem. This is about our negative side taking over. Just to keep things balanced Neville you should also write one about the positives. This was quite scary, but so well written. Your title excellent. I had vivid imagery of death by hanging. Trap doors and nooses.

[Neville]

You might well be write there our Chris... thank you as always.. am glad the title worked too.... N x

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Neville, this is excellent. It made me think of "I'm your worst nightmare." The poem has its own cadence and takes on a life of its own, although it is certainly a scary read.

Thanks for posting. :-)

[Neville]

My day has been made by thee (lol).. you are most kind my friend and much appreciated.... N x

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Thanks, Neville. You deserve the recognition for your work.

[Neville]

nevertheless, I am truly grateful for your visits and encouragement.... Neville :)

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

No problem!

[Neville]

............. very kind tho..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's almost like the movie "10 Things I hate about you"--
we hate those things in ourselves and yet without them, we wouldn't be we, would we?

[Neville]

insight is without any doubt, one of them bloomin double edged swords jacob.. many thanks for reminding me of that and for visiting these words.. N