Hit Me

Hit Me

 

Hit me

Like a freight train

Out the blue

 

This is my reality

Without you

I would have never

 

Not in a million years

Known such a

Black Heart

 

Cruel joke

Toxic waste of space

A glorious vacuum

 

End of story

 

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

That is one hell of a forceful first stanza Neville. She had quite an impact, ( please excuse the pun). Vacuums are indeed empty space. They can be replaced by something much better or dare I say it, if you are unlucky then by something far worse. Have you summed up a whole relationship in one short poem?

Chris

[Neville]

just words our Chris... :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Ouch. A glorious vacuum. Not much else can be said

[Neville]

vacuum's do it for me every time...

[Robert Trakofler]

hey stop beating around the bush man, tell us how you really feel!!!!!
you know, by the way--nature abhors a vacuum.....

[Neville]

one day I'm gonna say it like it aint.. then am gonna despise myself... maybe.. cheers Bb