Heart

Heart

 

Forever keeping

Time and marking

Moments

There she sits

Left off centre

 

That portion of

Herself

She Fears no man

Will ever want

Yet all men crave

 

Nestled somewhere

Deep within and

Protected on all her

Sides by a somewhat

Softer inner core

 

Then surrounded

By her much harder

Outer shell

Yes there it lies

And lays beating

 

Waiting to be loved

No less impressed

Tho solemnly addressed

Anticipating a sudden

Surprise caress perchance

 

Her heart beats

All a gentle flutter

Like the outstretched

Wings of a

Fledgling sunbittern  

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I watched on utube a sunbittern, and very beautiful it was too. Such long slender legs. Exterior coatings can often hide a much softer inner core. Just look at Cadbury's cream eggs. There's another one for you. I really like the last stanza. I imagine that feeling.

[Neville]

Hey, get you.. thanks our Chris, another very much appreciated visit.... N :)

[Lorry]

Well as much as I respect Chris' choice of confectionary, I'd have opted for the journeyman of confection, the cadburys chocolate coated turkish delight.
I think my choice is superior in many ways, but most of all, it isn't an egg with that sugary yolk gunk in it.
Seriously, I wouldn't eat one, even if I was a diabetic having a hypo (well, it wouldn't be my first choice is what im saying)
As for your poetry, yeah, pretty good 😀

[Neville]

cheers Lorry mate you are a brick sir :))

[emmajoy]

What beautiful words to read - my first of the day. Can imagine your female readers sat sitting with an enigmatic smile on their lips wondering if.. and why not! You've a way of looking deeply beneath layers and seeing most if not all the feminine complexities.

As to that final stanza, it's as delicious as the honey on my toast!

[Neville]

make no mistake, the words you left here today cast a warm glow upon the page, like the most comfortablest of shawls might cast upon yon shoulders neath..

thank you emmajoy :)

[emmajoy]

' might cast upon yon shoulders neath '

Sire, thou arte bewitched by that long-legged creature, thy words turned past away!

Smiling, toast finished, the outdoors calls me for a stroll. Keep well, keep safe. :)

[Anjeline]

I don't have words for such a nice poem. It brought a big smile on my face. I loved the language and the sophisticated style of the poem. Beautifully and wonderfully framed 💚

[Neville]

I am at something of a loss as to how I might thank you for such a glowing comment on these words.. under the circumstances, thank you seem quite inadequate..but I do... N

[Anjeline]

You're welcome 😁😊

[Neville]

............ :) x

[Ken Simm.]

You had me even before you got to that last line. But then it went stellar. Wings of a fledgling sunbittern is a poem in its own right. But I suppose it helps if you know what one is.
And the rest of the poem leads you into that so well. Extraordinary. The outer beauty hides so much.

[Neville]

Thank you Ken... Neville

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle, wonderful and amazing description for the heart. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Neville]

You are very kind Coyote, many thanks indeed.. Have a swell weekend my friend.. N

[Mrudula Rani]

Your writing is full of Empathy for a broken hearted soul, that's longing once more for warmth and tenderness. But not sure she will ever repossess it. Your gentle heart writes the best delicate poetry, Neville.

[Neville]

Smiling shyly, blushing profusely and thanking you ever so muchly M.. many thanks my dear friend and true.. hope you have a lovely day :)

[Mrudula Rani]

It's always my pleasure N, have a wonderful weekend.

[Neville]

you too M x

[Mrudula Rani]

Obrigada, querido.

[Neville]

....... N:)ing

[BBP]

Well... I do hate birds lol but that one is elegant and fits the write so well. I love stories of troubled women who feel unwanted but don't see it makes the men flock.

[Neville]

Flocking ensures the survival of the species.. or at least makes the attempt to ensure survival is more fun..... cheers my friend.. a most welcome visit and my gratitude is seriously sincere....... N :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is beautiful...and yes, some women cannot imagine that men really want them for their hearts and not just their bodies...and if they have suffered the pain of being left...start thinking they aren't worthy of love.
But as your poem expresses...that is not true...
and her heart will start fluttering again, and she will fly to one who definitely wants her heart.

i like the subtle rhymes mixed in here.

j.

[Neville]

I can not thank you enough for that first part sentence jacob... you are of course right... am really glad these words seemed to resonate ..... cheers sir.... N