Past Tense

 

Past Tense

 

Eyes open

Yet still

Pitch black

 

Think man

What may

Have gone wrong

 

No signal

Breath held fast

Motionless

 

Silent

No pain

No poetry

 

Pronounced

Passed at 19:57 p.m

Precisely….

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Most advice given states that we should live in the present rather than the past or the future. The present though lasts for seconds before it becomes the past. I have read the other comments left on your page and find them interesting. Old people tend to live in the past more, young people look to the future, so who resides in the present, I wonder. Who is definitely living in the present? Your loss of sight poem is frightening. It appears to have gone and that is a mercy. That is how I understood you and I imagine it was tense.

Chris

[Neville]

maybe folk should start referring to the 'here & now', although there would always be those who apply the same interpretation as they do for the term the present... I know what I mean anyway.. thanks.. N

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

In the dense of the stillness, the quiet of what’s happening and happened right there and then here and now - only the heartbeat or the breathe would could be heard- trying to understand what’s happened to another or just exiting this life- nothing else to be done than be there or here and experience what’s happening- nothing to be said only felt or even-...nothing....just be....🌹

[Neville]

I would like a double helping of that delightful spiritual positivity, if you dont mind... thank you :) Neville

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Seconds about to be served- with custard perhaps-warm???🌹

[Neville]

my favourite.. can I bring my own bowl.. pretty please :)

[lightsong]

in the depths of these lines, You speak to me and with me, at first I felt like it was the "awaking" moment when You become aware in Your unconsciousness, then how surprisingly amazingly Your verses turned, specially the last two ones, they hit, for me You spoke of numbness at the highest level, "no pain, no poetry" it might be even one of the highest level of being, it's like You are split from this world and You are living in another one, and even if Your last verse speaks of death and passing away, this is a true gem, I highly applaud You dear Neville.

[Neville]

how I wish I could see the world as you see it my friend... methinks you have a special eye.. whatever the case, I am very happy with your interpretation and impression of these words.. and who wouldn't be.... Neville :)

[lightsong]

Your eyes see their own special and unique way too my dear Neville :) and me thinks that You are far too kind to this G girl...

[Neville]

Funny how we think similarly on some things innit G Girl..
Neville)

[lightsong]

couldn't agree more ;)

[Neville]

.............. N is :) ing

[kentuck14]

A new and keen way of looking at "past tense". More of that than the present . . . that's for dang sure!!
! would say there is no poetry in the present tense . . . just a thought5.
T

[Neville]

cheers Tom.. I dunno, I often write about the here and now and occasionally about the future too.. Neville

[kentuck14]

Think about how long the present tense lasts and then get my drift.

[Neville]

by definition the present tense is surely either a constantly shifting moment, or a constant contradiction in time... the tide is presently out...