noitcelfeR

noitcelfeR

 

Before I managed

To escape

And found myself

I was a mere reflection 

In a mirror

On someone else’s shelf

 

Author's Note

more of a question really... should I lose the first line (take my word)

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

In answer to the question Yes. In my opinion the first line is surplus to requirements. You already have the reader's attention, it is not necessary to demand it.

Regarding the poem, I love what you have done with the title. As to the content, we all need to be ourselves. Not what someone else or a mirror's reflection tells us we are.

Chris

[Neville]

Oh my gawsh.. now I'm in a right old quandary … thanks C not sure what to do write now am gonna have to sleep on it....

[Chris Shaw]

Ha... Your call poet. Don't lose any sleep over it :)

[Neville]

………………. :)

[Beccy]

I looked up noitcelfer in the dictionary, couldn't find it, most puzzling? Sort of same as when I look in a mirror really, like most of us, I tend to only see what I think I see. :})

As for the first line Neville; you could just add 'for it,' after 'take my word,' that'd work ok.

Beccy.

[Neville]

Dang, so many variants to consider my heads buzzin… Is that a yes then B Oh' n cheers by the way x

[lakinbob]

Quite a reflective write here.

Prior to escaping of course, we have first come to realise we are trapped.

[Neville]

thank you for visiting and considering these words & for your insight left behind....

Neville

[Lorry]

Nope. Leave as is Neville, superb observation, and many congratulations in escaping being on the other side of that mirror and knowing that what we see in it is merely a 2D opinion of lights reflection.
I just ignore mirror me now. Itmakes shaving a nightmare, but I'm sick of the sight of him. 😀

[Neville]

Oh my gawsh.. now I'm in a right old quandary … thanks L not sure what to do write now am gonna have to sleep on it....