Remarkably Unfinished

Remarkably Unfinished

 

 

Discover me

She said

Then celebrate

Each

Find you make

Along

The way and

Mark them

With a x

Oh’ yes she said

Explore

And contemplate

Each

Rise and fall

Each turn and curve

Each

Cleft and crease

And subtle dip

Examine me

With fingertips

And eyes and lips

Then

Let me go and freely

 

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

How sensual this is. I found myself following those fingertips, eyes and lips. Such close scrutiny and then the end lines. This dame is not for taming. She will not be caged. Free as our avian friends to roam and land when and where she pleases.

Chris

[Neville]

she was precisely like that and I did love her so....Thank you Chris..

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

A poem of memory and not of imagination. I'm sure she loved you too in her own free spirit way. Like a butterfly she couldn't settle, off to pastures new.

[Neville]

Almost, she died

[Chris Shaw]

Sad ending on both accounts :((

[Writergurl]

This is wonderful, it just flows perfectly down the page...
such a lovely write

[Neville]

Thank you kindly writergurl .. Many thanks indeed

Neville :)

[Robert Trakofler]

PERFECT TITLE! and awesome poem Nev! It brought all sorts of memories back to me

[Neville]

Thanks sir Robert .. so glad to see you are on the mend .. You have been very much on my mind of late ... Take care, go well & write on ........ N :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Such intensity in love and yet I love how you drive home into the reader that to love is not to hold but to free.

[Neville]

I like that you get it Dhara_Ditzy Kat .. thank you my friend .. where have you been and do hope you are well :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I was closed for sometime as I got depressed by the pandemic Neville. Many good friends closed and left and I was dissapointed. But am back now...the cafe beckons as always...

[Neville]

sheesh ... I am sorry to hear that D_DK .. sincerely hope you are feeling much better ... read more
sheesh ... I am sorry to hear that D_DK .. sincerely hope you are feeling much better ...

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Oh yes. Much much better now and hope to be even better in the coming time. Thanks my friend.

[Neville]

.................. good news :)

[Patricia Wedel]

Free to go and perhaps return...
an Arrow carried in a heart of hearts.
tenderly, Pat

[Neville]

.......... That'll do nicely Pat, thank you & true :)

[Beccy]

'Remarkably unfinished.' How much more fulfilling is that, as compared to when all has been discovered and nothing is left to imagination and memory.

This is both sensuous and so very insightful.

Beccy.

[Neville]

I'll take that as a yes then ... ta Beccy and ever so muchly :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Beautifully penned passionate write. Poems like this need no punctuation. Tyfs

[Neville]

thank you my friend .. much appreciated :)

[Fay Slimm]

Personal and filled with a female's private invitations the feel of your last lines along with the title betrays any permanence -- - yet on further reading I see special closeness in "celebrate each find you make" "then let me go freely" so even if but for a short while those moments will never be lost if held in the memory - - - a most moving write Nev.

[Neville]

Huge thanks are winging there way from here to where you are right now ... Bless ya Fay :)read more
Huge thanks are winging there way from here to where you are right now ... Bless ya Fay :)

[Einstein Noodle]

read this again Neville ... what a turn on .. what a woman! .. so romantic .. its a keeper :)
E.

[Neville]

Thanks Gene.. yes, she was kind of special :)

N.

[Einstein Noodle]

i didn't mention the title .. "Remarkably Unfinished" .. love that too .. you are a creative talent my friend .. and your closing is poignant .. the freeing of the songbird in hand is a glorious healing freedom in and of itself .. fine poem of love sir!

[Neville]

Those words of yours above mean an awful lot to me Gene .. thank you so much my friend :)read more
Those words of yours above mean an awful lot to me Gene .. thank you so much my friend :)

[Chris Shaw]

Good to have another read of this most sensual write, but also with the knowledge this time, this beautiful free spirit is now a dust mote, dancing for eternity in the heavens. That is so sad, but she leaves you with lovely memories and is forever captured and framed for all to read and visualise in your beautiful poetry.

Chris

[Neville]

... there is indeed a kind of permanence that poetry bestows upon people and places .. many thanks dear Chris for your second visit and seriously kind words ,

Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

Yes, there is permanence in poetry. That pleases me no end when everything else around us is fleeting:)

[Einstein Noodle]

blissful ... fall in love romantic .. tastefully sensuous dear friend .. such a perfect sharing of a Valentine's gift ;)
E.

[Neville]

Cheers me good friend.... Doh' now ya done it mentioning the V word :)

N.

[Einstein Noodle]

better get out there and do your job sir! you'll be in trouble if you don't :-O

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. great title .. love it! unfinished eternal expectations .. lingering

[Neville]

Great minds eh Gene.....Down ya neck Squire :))))

[Einstein Noodle]

and yours my friend :)))))))))))))