Impact

Impact

It would now

seem

fairly safe to

suggest

He was well

and truly

broken, long

before

the last train

first hit ..

However,

I do hereby

confess ..

I feel much

better

these days,

eating

dust from off

the back

of blue lights

with a shot or two ..

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Long before the last train first hit …a very strong metaphor would be preferable to the alternative

However, I have to say that blue lights, and dust of these days aren’t very reassuring.

A shot or two might lift the spirits briefly.

This poem had an impact on me. The broken man clearly wasn’t himself. I read the poem several times. I’m not sure he has healed.

Your poetry, takes the reader on a journey Neville. This one is driven by emotion.

A thought provoking write. Wishing you a bright Tuesday.

Chris

[Neville]

thanks a million Chris and back at you .. Neville :)