An Uncertain Kind of Aloneness

An Uncertain Kind of Aloneness

When we first met

her hair was

the same colour as

tropical sand

caressed by waves

and the sea ..

So when I close my

eyes slow now,

I can maybe still

find us,

on an empty beach

somewhere

and with any luck

about to become

naked ..

Although we are

never alone are we ..

They just

placed a camera

and a microphone

inside the belly

of my mandolin ..

How else can they

possibly

continue to rape

and abuse us ..

Now that our pride

and dignity are gone ..

Reviews

[Anushka joshi]

The use of metaphors is clever. It was an emotional curve

[Neville]

thank you both kindly and true Anushka :)

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful work, I love the beach metaphor.

[Neville]

Cheers Tom .. 👍

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Neville .. your Poem strikes a Chord with me… the Mandolin is awareness with 🎶 🎻 Violins that keep the orchestrated Events where the Spirit abides. May the Mysteries of the Universe control the Outcome. tenderly, Pat

[Neville]

I too am not one for discord & much prefer dat chord to dem chords but any decent tune will do at the end of the day .. both gently and kindly Pat

Neville

[Matthew Kult]

That took a left turn. I was so excited about the glory days getting naked but then we find someone being spied on.

Great write,

With love

Matthew

[Neville]

thanks Matt .. take care .. all good things .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Starts so well and full of promise. Sadly prying eyes stole the romance and turned it into something else. These lines are penned on a thread of nostalgia, sadness and a tad of lonely. So very nicely conveyed Neville.

Chris

[Neville]

Thanks a billion Chris .. always so much appreciated .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

I’ve just read this one again. Are we ever alone these days? There seem to be cameras everywhere and a feeling that big brother is watching over us. So much for freedom. It is being eroded all the time. Someone somewhere is looking and listening in. A different take on this poem Neville.

[Neville]

That's a dubble win win Chris .. thanks for taking a second peek .. it is amazing what we might miss if we are not careful .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Aye…you speak the truth there chuck:)