Spillage

Spillage

 

Swollen like a river

  

flooded ..

Swollen like some

thirsty

  engorged gourd ..

Swollen

like some bloated

stream,

now far too deep to

  

safely ford ..

Swollen like some

blue vein

throbbing, nigh on

  

fit to burst ..

Swollen like some

second

coming, moisten lips

and then

 

quench this thirst ..

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

are you getting a little chubby my friend? swelling up like a gourd?? ... best get that taken care of pronto Kemosabe .. you are a nuaghty boy, Neville .. nice form .. line ... and pretty masterful rhyme thrown in the works ... fine stuff my friend .. thanks for sharing this playful poem of metaphor and the real
E.

[Neville]

good boys are nice .. naughty boys may be bad but they have the most fun .. just saying on behalf of a friend .. thank you for noticing my metaphor E .. that's what they are phor innit .. Down your neck N.

[Einstein Noodle]

celebrating me 75th today, Nev.! don't tell anyone .. started off with a black 'n tan and am on my way to coffee whiskey ... salud!

[Neville]

Dang .. I may have missed the party brother but many and I do mean many congratulations to you .. I shall have to wait until later this eve before raising my glass to you and your pen .. but be sure I shall and one with your name on it .. Down ya neck bud .. Neville 🎂🎁📦😎💛👍

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Nev! our "getting to be" long friendship here is something i hold with gratitude.

[Neville]

and likewise, a sentiment reciprocated & truly :))

[Anushka joshi]

Oh I might be reading this side of your poetry for the first time I guess. Fun fact:- I made myself sure before writing by reading other reviews. 😂

[Neville]

I both admire and respect your caution ..
and I also thank you for taking time to stop by ..
From a personal point of view, I very rarely read any of my reviewing predecessors comments before leaving my own .. Neville 😎👍


Neville

[Chris Shaw]

The swelling in this poem leaves absolutely nothing to the imagination. You even added the detail of blue veins. I am looking away 😀

Your norty side is coming out to play. I can hear your mum telling you to behave :)

Chris

[Neville]

the devil's in the detail our Chris .. I so wish I could hear her too .. thank you .. Neville

[Ken Simm.]

Whoops I'll have to wait to stand up again.

[Neville]

if you can wait that long, then there aint no urgency

[Stella Armour]

Pretty urgent then my friend..

[Neville]

Not half ... 👍

[Stella Armour]

..........🤣