Autumn Found

Autumn

now is the time

the world's Summer-topped pillow

flips over slowly

revealing a fresh airy coolness

while the dust

begins to settle in the attic

just in time for

wool sweater-filled boxes to escape

where freedom can be felt

standing beneath a forest

on top of golden pathways

that lead on, into winter 

Reviews

[cloud]

you wrote this really good. i can feel the cool pillow.

[Astro]

Thanks H, glad you liked it.

[SilentDream]

This brought on a knowing smile =) Your piece captures the gentleness and comfort I find in autumn. My favorite lines "the world's Summer-topped pillow/flips over slowly/revealing a fresh airy coolness." Nodding and thinking, Exactly! Well done.

[Astro]

Thanks Dream, I'm glad we share a similar appreciation to Autumn. Thanks for the review.

[Lilly]

Beautiful!
How I wish it were Autumn here in Australia and I could wrap up in a sweater while walking a golden path into winter!
Lovely imagery in this poem.

[Astro]

Well you could always hug a sheep and imagine. Lol thanks Lily for the review happy you could be transported to the autumn scene you crave.

[Lilly]

Haha well a sheep might be more easily found in New Zealand (not that they're hard to find here)- So maybe a koala or kangaroo? haha
You're welcome.
Yes I'll have to settle for imagining an autumn anyway!

[Astro]

Hahaha, my bad although, I've never seen a wooly kangaroo, or a wooly koala but that gives me an idea for Halloween. lol.

[Lilly]

Hahaha no I guess they're not woolly - Sounds like an interesting Halloween :P

[Dye]

My favorite season! You painted a picture that I could feel here. Sweater weather with the feel of that crisp air, walking on the golden leaves. Very lovely!

[Astro]

Thanks Dye, glad yu could crawl into my attic space and find something warm.

[Frieda P]

Ingenious using the pillow analogy Astro, the other side of the pillow is always cooler when you flip it over... this has a very crisp feel to it, well done.

[Astro]

Thanks Frieda, I thought that you might like this one, seeing as you have written some nice seasonal lines yourself lately.

[Laminators Dubai]

This so cool and so creative!
Loved it!XD

[Astro]

Thank you very much Glitch, I'm really glad you liked it. Thanks for being the first to review it. :)

[Laminators Dubai]

Its cool as me!....lol

[Astro]

That's pretty cool!