The Two of Us

  where are you, how are you
it can be hard
I know, you know.

 

I stop at a red light at the crossroad
you are the one I am looking for amongest everyone
by foot, in a cab or in a bus
two eyes looking at you and then going away
into brisk winds, lost in traffic
cars honking madly in laughable chaos.

 

where are you, how are you
I'll change, if you change
the two of us, we are alike
two wrestlers, two veterans

Two love songs as you and I
with the same words in a cafe.

 

I just want to say now that you are leaving
if that is love, you'll see love
you'll be living because of love.

 

What are you doing tonight
I phone, you're not home, says leave a message
but the recorder is so much faster than I
thus I never know what to say.

 

where are you, how are you
you're not there, where are you going
I am here, like you are
with this scare to love.

 

two minutes, two hours, forever
duelists in the sea of this town
where everyone needs love
exactly as we do........

 

where are you, how are you
two even if, you're not there
you and I, always or never
we are like we are
we exist as two.

Nico S.           

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

You always write with such emotion and truthfulness to your words. I liked the way you added the pictures to paint the scenes a little clearer. This was a wonderful piece and the story is something i am sure most have experienced at some point in life.


Wel Done!!!!!!

[Arlene Fleisher]

Very nice... very emotional... I can feel your pain. Thanks for sending it to me.

[Angel Bird]

Everyone knows of the twin part to a soul, and everyone is searching for it - constantly! Some knowingly - some unconsciously. Some find their soul twin - some search forever ... - some believe to have found it, and learn they are wrong ...

Brilliant and inspiring piece!

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With this scare to love??? Not sure where you were going with that Nico. The gist of this seems to be that you would prefer the 'two' to be one, but your message is not really clear. I understand what you are trying to convey here, but you would be wise to consider revising a little to give light to the obscurity...
Helen :-)))

[Kara Emily Krantz]

great ending. the flow of this piece worked really well... i was impressed with that. the slight repetetion was just enough to keep me paced and flowing through the lines, but not enough that it got to be overhwelming or annoying

'but the recorder is so much faster than I
thus I never know what to say."

ha, i like that.

great job with this. one of my favorites of yours, methinks

[Kasey Klein]

A nice piece, Nico. I find this much better than Letters.

Almost like the mind, views of a stalker, not able to let go.

Great line: cars honking madly in laughable chaos

you are the one I am looking for amongest (amongst) everyone

[H. A. M.]

Lost in the crowd.
It reminds me of the girls I had the chance to speak to and never did.
I like the where are you ,how are you line in this.
It makes it song like to me.
Nice one.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

full of emotion - great piece of writing...

[Thanh]

beautiful piece!!! great job!!!!

[Joseph - Michael]

And the two shall become the one...

Anyway, it's pretty good and I enjoyed reading it very much so...

[TamerQtaish]

Man honestly this is yet another beautiful piece of your writings, a bit out of my mood for these days, but none the less beautiful and deep like all your writings i read till now

All the best,
Tamer Qtaish