Insane

Sitting in this room
Nothing left to do
Every minute passing by
Just a moment in time
 
Losing every bit
Starting to throw a fit
The nurse is coming in
With nothing but a grin
 
Something in her hand
Wonder what she's planned
Is it for me she brings
A trinket of things
 
A slight pinch I feel
It's so unreal
The sleep it brings
No one to here my screams

Reviews

[Chaos Rain]

I first want to ask you what happened to you? I'm just curious, I do like how the poem leaves it up to the reader to decide what happened to you, but I still want to know the true answer, if it's ok with you. I feel that when you are trying to create a rhyming, it feels like you're forcing the poem to rhyme, instead of just letting it flow. I think you are loosing the meaning of the poem because you are only focusing on the rhyming, not the emotion. However, I do like the ending line of the poem a lot.
I really hope that helped you.
Love,
Chaos Rain.