The day I leave

My Requiem

The day I leave,

Do not think I have any regrets

I shall live in my words

I shall breathe through memories

Which people recall on my grave.

I want them to remember me,

He dared enough to be brave.

The day I leave,

Whisper "Ode To Joy" on my tomb

So I shall rest in peace,

like a baby in his mother's womb .

The day I leave,

Look for me in my photos,

A child of no awareness

An old man recalled for his braveness

The day I leave,

I want the woman I shall kneel to

I want the woman whom I can really feel

The woman whom I will someday meet

To be by my side till my last breathe

Carress her hair in my absence

Calm her like I used to do in her presence

Let her be proud of herself

For she redeemed a miserable man

Who once said he was:

" A man with a plan"

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The hopefulness here is beautiful, the wish for grateful remembrance and a love everlasting. There is a softness hear, your words like a warm summer breeze. Beautiful!

[Nima.Hope]

A warm summer breeze.... That's going to be the title of my next poem I think... Wow! What an inception Linda, thank you my dear friend. Honored by your review I am. Thanks🙏🌹

[Chris Shaw]

A lovely composition here Nima. Projecting yourself into the future and anticipating end days. I think most of us would wish to be remembered in a positive light. Thoughts as well as to finding that very special love who will make your living all the worth while. I so enjoyed reading you again my young friend. A most touching read. Have a wonderful weekend.

Chris

[Nima.Hope]

In Persian poetry, there's been an unwritten rule in which the poet writes a requiem for him/herself. So I thought I write something like that too😅.
I'm honored by your words dear Chris, thank you my wise friend. I'm glad I have something to offer in this circle of great minds and great poets.
Wish you all the very best ma'am 🌹

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Nima. I love your requiem for yourself. What a beautiful tradition in Persian poetry. You educate me:) Your rose is received with joy this morning:) Have a wonderful day.

[Nima.Hope]

You're so kind to say I'm educating you ma'am. There are many things about Persian poetry which many people do not know globally, even the poets. Why? The answer is the ritards rulling my country......

[Chris Shaw]

I understand my friend. I really do ……… 🌹

[Nima.Hope]

Only if our king was alive......

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a touching and poignant reflection on life and death. The repetition of "The day I leave" creates a sense of inevitability and finality, while the imagery of living through words and memories is powerful and moving. The desire to be remembered for bravery and courage is a noble aspiration, and the reference to "Ode to Joy" adds a sense of joy and celebration to the poem. The final stanza is particularly heartfelt, with the speaker expressing his desire for a loving partner to be by his side until the end. The final lines are a beautiful tribute to the transformative power of love and the ability of one person to change another's life for the better. Overall, your poem is a beautiful and heartfelt tribute to the human experience. Well done!

[Nima.Hope]

Your review is written so completely and I thank you so much for all the kind words dear Bhuyanshi.
Best wishes for you my friend
Nima