Duet

The Jazz in her veins
The Blues in His soul
They dance a wondrous waltz
Twirling in melodious synchronicity
Staccato strikes and yelps
Rhythmic thuds and sharp intake
The breath rushes past her clenched teeth
With pleasing sizzle to His ears
Her tears and sweat
A luscious libation
For an unquenchable tongue
The song, the Duet,
Written on skin
Played, practiced, perfected
Performed and acclaimed

Reviews

[The Iron Horseman]

I like the way you open with the music and the dance, then it becomes the metaphor for the relationship.
Very nice write, my friend.
I'm not sure a jazz person and a blues person is a mix that will last long, though! :)

[Nipplegrinder]

Thank you, my friend. As for jazz and blues, well, yanno, metaphors. ;D

[The Iron Horseman]

You're welcome, buddy.
As in jazz is a metaphor for music, eh? :) Just kidding!

[Carson Kramer]

We should talk music, sometime. I'll venture a guess, we like much of the same. For instance, knowing you're from Canada, my favorite band, is Rush. Wonder how you feel about those fellas?

[The Iron Horseman]

They were a great seventies band. They are still terrific musicians, but they are stale - they are still regurgitating the same seventies stuff with different words. Another great Canadian band is the Headstones - a very hard edge with realy cutting lyrics. Do you know them?

[Kelly Scheppers]

I could swim in your opening lines. How fabulous! "A luscious libation for an unquenchable tongue." Lovely!

[Nipplegrinder]

How kind of you, Kelly. Very pleased you enjoyed it.

[KWP]

attraction is a funny thing - it swoops in hard and fast and gives even the blandest song a sense of meaning - being caught in the lust of the moment is one of the magical things about being human - the capacity to feel on a physical level should be seized and conquered whenever and wherever possible - I like it X

[Nipplegrinder]

I agree. Thank you, for your kind review.

[Corset]

Certainly it takes all kinds, and for everyone way there is another willing to travel it.

[Nipplegrinder]

I see your point.

[wordman]

very impressive,like we are there looking on

[Nipplegrinder]

Thanks, brother. Appreciate it.

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Lyn Anderson]

While I tend to prefer my party a little less Grey, a voyeur can appreciate the view, So far i am two for two here. Great work

[Nipplegrinder]

Less Grey. Hehe. I hate that crap. Gives us a bad name.

[Relic]

I don't know why anyone would pass this up without a review. I love the whole concept behind it and the metaphors/similes are superb. 100 from me.

[Nipplegrinder]

Probably posted it at 2am on a Saturday night. But, I'm massively flattered by your review. Thank you my friend.

[Relic]

You're welcome.