Discovering Myself

A yellow lazy moon is shining through your eyes

Staring at my breasts, caressing my thighs

 

A summer humid park is touching through your palm

Sliding up my legs, tenderly and calm

 

Electric starry night is breathing through your lips

Burning me inside, shivering my hips

 

Discovering myself through finger tips of yours --

I am a tiny cell in your giant universe

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

the simplest and most complex kind of exploring there is, isnt it

thanks for the journey, im glad we got to come along

:)

[dillonjensen]

A very sensual poem you have written and I'd go so far as to say perfected it. I get the feeling of young love when I read this, and I really like how this is short and to the point. Many people try to hide beneath a shadow of copious amounts of words because they fear they are not a strong enough writer to shorten it, whereas you light up the room with such clarity in so few lines. Very impressive! 97/100

[poeticpiers]

SElf discovery through the medium of another
But tenderly described

[tcpaessler]

"bu-ut oh, those su-ummer nights!" Well done.

[Igor G. Balatsky]

Both versions - English and Russian - are nice, yet they are rather different, in my opinion. How right you are here: we are discovered by Love.

[ba_mcfarlane]

So well done...yum yum yum

[S. Michael Long]

very very well written, sensual, seductive, to the point, however, i think the third stanza is an abstraction.. maybe not, i just don't understand it.. Great work!

[Igor G. Balatsky]

grasshoppers, stars
and mattioli... your gentle
whisper on my lips

[Forest Green]

Your poem sparkles; an innocent visit into thoughts of budding love..simple yet timeless.


Nicely done...